WRTTING ENGLISH B2
Đề 1: New technologies have changed the way
chiden spend their free time. Do the advantages of
this outweigh disadvantage?
Introduction: 2 sentences.
Paraphrase ý của đề bài by using synonyms or
other structures
• In today's world,
• newtechnologies = novel technological developments
• have changed = have altered ?
• the way chidren spend their time = how kids spend their leisure
time
→ In today's world, novel technological developments have
altered how kids spend their leisure time.
Person's sentence : In recent years, the rapid development of
modern technologies has significantly transformed the way
children spend their leisure time. Instead of engaging in
traditional outdoor activities, many children now rely heavily on
electronic devices and digital platforms for entertainment.
* 2nd sentence: These Statement : mở ra ý của đề
bài
→ Chọn viết lợi ích nhiều hơn.
• Despite some obvious drawbacks of this trend/ issue, i
believe that these one outweighed/surpassed by the
benefits
(Áp dụng tất cả các đề).
• While it is true that this development poses a number of
challenges, I firmly believe that its merits surpuss its
demerits.
Body:
Body 1: Disadvantages
On the one hand, there are some / several major demerith
/weaknesses when children use too much free time to play with
technological devices
On the one hand, childrens excessive engagement with
modern devices during leisure hours entails a range of
detrimental effects
a range of = a wealth of = a wide varilty of .
* Disadvantage 1: adversely aftected on health.
• To begin with
• This trend
• In the first place
→ This trend has a bad/negative/adverse effect/impact/influence
on the health.
Support sentence 1:
Children who devote a large amount of time to video, games and
screentime activities are likely to suffer from healthy problems
such as eyestrain, short - sightedness or obesity.
Support sentence 2:
Chidren who spent too much time on screen-based activities may
also experience reduced concentration levels and sleep
disturbances, both of which can negatively affect their overall
development.
* Disadvantage 2nd: less time for othersocial activities
• Secondly,
• Additionally,
• Another negative effect is less time for other social activities.
Support sentence:
Children tend to play electronic games, surfing/browsing
the internet instead of hanging out with their peers,
joining communal activities.
→ This lead to the social isolation which serious affects their later
lives
== As a result, they may suffer from social isolation, which has
lasting adverse effects on their later life.
Body 2: Advantages
Topic sentence:
• method 1: On the other hand, it is also beneficial for
chidren it they spend their spare time on using technological
application /devices in a suitable / an appropriare way...
• method 2: On the other hand, the benefits are more
significant than such disadvantages.
* Advantage 1:
• Firstly,
• Primarily,
• In the first place, technology help children advanced
knowledge and learn numerous/a wide range of valuable life
skills...
• Primarily, these devices serve as a gateway to vast educational
resources.
• This is because the digital world offers a plethora of interactive
apps and online platforms that allow children to research diverse
topics instantly.
• As a result, this constant exposure helps them broaden their
horizons and cultivate essential self-learning skills.
* Advantage 2: Entertainment.
Another benefit of using modem devices is a that they serve
as a source of entertainment, which helps children relieve
stress and stay energized.
Support sentence:
Children can access a wide variety of entertainment
programs available on television or social media such as
cartoons, music shows, or interactive games,...
→ Consequently, such entertainment not only helps chidren relax
affer long hour of study but also reduces stress and refreshes
their minds, enabling them to gain energy and maintain a positive
mood.
Conclusion:
In conclusion, although the increasing use of modern
technologies in children’s free time may limit physical activity and
social interaction, the benefits it brings in terms of knowledge
acquisition, creativity, and relaxation are far more significant.
Therefore, I firmly believe that the advantages of this trend
outweigh its disadvantages.