Exercise 2
rediction structure: Be
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expected/proposed/anticipated/forecast/estimated/projected/envisioned to
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Reach parity with each other: bằng với nhau
Overview:
30p
TRENDS:
Almost all energy sources are expected to increase, >< hydropower -stable
COMPARISON
Highest: petrol and oil + HTĐ - remains ….
ody1: fossil fuels - viết câu topic sentence
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Petrol and Oil - 1980 quá khứ 2005 đổi thì 2030
Natural Gas/Coal - 1980 - 2005 (bằng nhau) - 2030 (coal more significant
increase - surpass natural gas by
ody 2: topic sentence
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All started at … in 1980, followed by increase (...)
Nuclear and solar showed analogous patterns/trajectories/trends, stabilizing
before a modest uptick, ending …
Is expected to decrease - remain ….., fishing the period in the lowest
ranking/position. /fishing the period as the least common source.
helinechartillustrateshowmuch6differentsourcesofenergywereconsumedin
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the USA from 1980 to 2030 projections, based on the analysis from the Annual
Energy Outlook in 2008.
verall, what immediately stands out when examining the data is that almost all
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energy sources are expected to increase in the consumption level, with the
exceptionofhydropower,whichremainsrelativelystablethroughouttheperiod.It
is worth mentioning that petrol and oil remain the most commonly used fuels.
ocusing first on fossil fuels - petrol and oil, natural gas, and coal - they
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consistentlyoutnumberedrenewableenergyconsumption/usageexpenditureover
the surveyed period. By 1980, petrol and oil usage stood at 35 quadrillion units,
before growing slightly to 40 quadrillion units in 2005, notwithstanding some
fluctuations. Over the next 25 years, their consumption is proposed to rise
continuously by 10 quadrillion, ending at … . Trailing behind In contrast, gas and
coalreachedparitywitheachotheratnearly23quadrillionby2005.However,coal
isforecastedtosurgedramaticallytoapproximately33quadrillionunits,surpassing
natural gas by 6 quadrillion units.
urning to nuclear, solarandwind,andhydropower,whicharerenewablesources
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of energy, . All three categories began at roughly 4 quadrillion in 1980, then
increased marginally by varying degrees over 25 years later. Following thatthen,
nuclearandsolarpowershowed/exhibitedanalogouspatterns,stabilizingbeforea
modest uptick, ending at 8 quadrillion and 6 quadrillion units, in that order.
Meanwhile, hydropower is anticipated to remain stable at around 3 quadrillion
units, finishing the period as the least common sourceof energy.
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Sample:
he graph provides information from the 2008 Annual Energy Outlook on energy
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consumption in the United States from 1980,with projectionsextending to 2030.
verall, the consumption of nearly all energy sources is expected to rise, with the
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exception of hydropower, which is anticipated to remain stable by the end of the
period. It is also worth noting that petrol and oil remain the most widely used
energy sources throughout the timeline.
he U.S. predominantly relies on fossil fuels over the surveyed years.In 1980, the
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consumption of petrol and oil stood at approximately 35 quadrillion units (qu),
significantly outnumbering the figures for natural gas and coal. After fluctuating
for about two decades, petrol and oil usage rose to 40 qu in 2005 and is predicted
to increase steadily afterwards, ending at 50 qu by 2030 and securing its
preeminence.Meanwhile,the consumption level of naturalgas was 20
quadrillion units in 1980, 5 quadrillion units ahead of coal.These numbers
later experienced an upward fluctuation, reaching parity with each other at about
25 quadrillion units in 2005. Thereafter, coal is projected to register a more
significant increase, reaching over 30 qu by 2030, surpassing that of natural gas
by 5 qu.
enewable resources account for a significantly lower share despite an estimated
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uptick. These energy sources all started at about 3 qu, followed by a marginal
increase over the first 25-year period. Over the ensuing years, analogous patterns
re projected to be seen in the figures for nuclear and solar/wind, stabilizing
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before a slight rise to end at approximately 8 and 6 quadrillion units, in that order.
On the other hand, hydropower is projected to dip slightly to its initial level,
finishing the period as the least prevalent energy source.
Exercise 3:
The graphbelowshowsthepercentageofpeopleunemployedinthetotallabour
workforce across 9 countries in 1994 and 2004.
Country 1994 2004
Ireland 14.8% 4.4%
Poland 12.4% 19%
Italy 11.8% 8.4%
Canada 10.6% 7.7%
The UK 9.5% 4.7%
Germany 7% 9.4%
The USA 6% 5.4%
Australia 7.2% 4.7%
Japan 2.7% 4.5%
Intro: Unemployed = jobless = workless = out of work
Overall:
+ almost downticks, exception of Poland, Germany, Japan
+ Biggest change: Ireland, Poland
Body 1: Downticks trend
+Irelandsignificantlydecreasedroughly3times,followingbyTheUKdecrease2
times/ overtook Ireland
+ Italia, Canada, the USA, Australia decline significantly
Body 2: Upticks trend
+ Poland most change, biggest data
+ Germany and Japan change little, ⅓ Poland
The table illustrates the proportion of individuals who are jobless in 9 different
countries overthetwo years 1994 and 2004.
Overall, what immediately stands out when examining the data is that almost all
categories experienced downswings in joblessness downtick trends, with the
exceptions of Poland, Germany, and Japan, whichwitnessedaslightincrease.Itis
worth mentioning that Ireland had the highest unemployment rate in 1994;
however, in 2004, Poland recorded the highest figure among all countries.
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table provides information about the unemployment rates ofninecountriesin1994and
2004.
verall,what immediately stands out when examiningthe data isthat the majority of
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surveyed nations successfully curbed unemployment, except for Poland, Germany, and
Japan, which saw this issue worsen. It is also important to note that Ireland, which once
reported the highest joblessness level, ended the period with the lowest data, contrasting
sharply with Poland, which recorded the highest unemployment by the end of the period.
Looking first at the data of 6 different countries where unemployment fell by
varying degrees-Ireland,Italy,Canada,theUK,theUSA,andAustralia. Mìnhchia
làm hai đoạn đi
Looking first at countries where employment reducedsignificantly,inIn1994,the
proportion of people who were out of work in Irelanddroppeddramatically,from
14.8% in 1994 to 4.4% in 2004, becoming the country with the lowest rate of
worklesspeople.Similarly,albeittoalowerdegree,theUK’sfigurestoodat9.5%by
1994, before halving to roughly 4.7%overa decadelater.
Regardingnationswithmodestdrops,Meanwhile,thepercentageofjoblesspeople
in Italy, Canada, Australia,andtheUSAwereapproximately11.8%,10.6%,7.2%,and
6%,respectively,afterwhichthesefiguresdeclinedbynearly3%percentagepoints
overthesurveyedtimeline.By2004,theemploymentratesofthesecountrieswere
8.4%, 7.7%, 4.7%, and 5.4%, in that order. Chỗ này nên táchUSra1câunhévìnó
khác mức tăng
TurningtoPoland,Germany,andJapan,thesecountriessawtheirwherethefigures
for of unemployed people/residents increase witnessed upswings over the
surveyed timeline. In 1994, 12.4% was the employment rate in of Poland Polish
unemployment, which rose before rising to 19% in 2004, which was the highest
figurerecordedinthetable.GermanyandJapanratesshowedamoremodestrises,
from7%and2.7%to9.4%and4.5%, respectively,in2004,whichweretwofoldand
fourfold lower than Poland’s'rate in the given order.
Generally, a good essay
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least 7.5 in writing.
Sample
he table provides information about the unemployment rates of nine countries in 1994
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and 2004.
Overall,what immediately stands out when examiningthe data isthat the majority of
surveyed nations successfullycurbed unemployment,except for Poland, Germany, and
Japan, which saw this issue worsen. It is also important to note that Ireland, which once
reported the highest joblessness level, ended the period with the lowest data, contrasting
sharply with Poland, which recorded the highest unemployment by the end of the period.
ooking first at nations demonstrating modest declines, in 1994, the proportions of
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unemployed workers in Italy, Canada, and Australia were 11.8%, 10.6%, and 7.2%,
respectively. By 2004, these nations saw their figures decrease by roughly 3 percentage
points, ending at 8.4%, 7.7%, and 4.7%, in that order. Likewise, albeit to a much smaller
extent, the US experienced a negligible fall in unemployment, from 6% to 5.4%.
urning to countries showing significant drops, in 1994, Ireland demonstrated the highest
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unemployment rate, with 14.8% of its totalworkforcefailing to find a job. However, 10
years later, this nation impressively lowered its joblessness rate to 4.4%, the lowest data
recorded in the survey. In a similar pattern, but to a lower degree, the figure for the UK
nearly halved from 9.5% in 1994 to only 4.7% by the end of the timeline.
n the other hand,joblessness worsenedin Poland,Germany, and Japan during the
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surveyed period. Notably, the most significant growth was recorded in Poland, rising
from 12.4% to 19% over the period, eventually exhibiting the highest unemployment rate
among the nine countries. Meanwhile, starting at 7% and 2.7%, Germany and Japan
experienced a slight increase of roughly 2 percentage points, concluding at 9.4% and
4.5%, in that order.