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Written Communication
Activity 1: Rewrite for Conciseness & Clarity
The following email draft is wordy and unclear. Rewrite it in a concise and clear
manner without changing the main message.
Draft Email:
Respected Sir, I am writing this email in order to let you know that I have been going
through some problems because of the bus services in our city and therefore, I am
facing quite a lot of challenges reaching college on time every day. It would be really
helpful if you could kindly provide me with some advice in this matter related to how
I should handle it and if possible grant me permission for arriving late in the class
whenever the buses are not on time.
Activity 2: Check for Completeness & Correctness
You are the Class Representative. Draft a notice to your classmates about an
upcoming Guest Lecture on “Entrepreneurship in India”. Ensure the notice follows the
7 C’s, especially completeness (all details included) and correctness (grammar,
spelling, formatting).
Details to include:
• Topic: Entrepreneurship in India
• Speaker: Mr. Rajesh Patil (Founder, StartUp India Hub)
• Date: 18th September, 2025
• Time: 11:00 AM – 12:30 PM
• Venue: Tata Hall
• Attendance: Mandatory for BBA and BBA IB (SY and TY students)
Activity 3: Make It Coherent & Concrete
The following paragraph lacks flow and specific details. Rewrite it to make it
coherent (logical flow) and concrete (specific, not vague). Write a 150 worded
paragraph describing the following event.
Paragraph:
Our college fest Astitva was good. Many events were there. Students liked it. Some
guests also came. Food was arranged. Overall, it was successful.
Activity 4:
Below are 6 wrongly written WhatsApp messages. Rewrite each message correctly,
applying the 7 C’s.
Message 1 (Unclear & Incomplete)
“Hey class is there tmrw??”
Task: Correct it so that it is clear and complete.
Message 2 (Not Courteous, Too Demanding)
“Send me the notes fast. I need now.”
Task: Rewrite politely and courteously.
Message 3 (Wordy & Confusing)
“I just wanted to inform you that I was kind of like not able to come for the class
today because of some reason and so please mark me present if possible.”
Task: Make it concise, clear, and correct.
Message 4 (Incorrect Grammar & No Specifics)
“Mam u said about test but not told when it is, plz tell.”
Task: Correct grammar, add courtesy, and make the request concrete.
Message 5 (Incomplete & Wrong Tone)
“Bro project thing??”
Task: Rewrite so it is complete, coherent, and clear.
Message 6 (Spelling Errors & Lack of Clarity)
“Hey mam thnx 4 lettin me no bt assignment bt I didnt understnd when it has 2b
submited.”
Task: Rewrite with correct spelling, grammar, and clarity.
Activity 5: Identify 10 mistakes in this e-mail.
Subject: Requesting you kindheartedly to come and do campus recruitment and
placements for our respected students in our BMCC college since long time we are
waiting for this oppurtunity which will help the future of our commerce background
students
Dear HR respected Sudha Rao,
I am writting this mail becaus our college BMCC Pune which is one of the most famus
colleges in Pune city is wanting to organise some kind of placements activity with
your bank which is called Barclays because many students are very interested to get
jobs and career in the banking and finance industry but there has been no
placements done from Barclays for the last many years in our campus so we are
waiting from long time that you can send your HR team for visiting us for the
placement drive but the dates are not decided yet because principal is still thinking
about it and we will decide later depending on when you are free.
Students are very eager and we hope you will consider to come. If you are comming
please let us know so that we can do some arrangements for classrooms and maybe
snacks if possible, but still its not confirmed how we will manage. Kindly do the
needful as early as you can possible and reply fastly.
Thanking you in advance for your cooperation and understanding in this matter
which is very urgent and important for the student’s bright future and also for
making our college reputation more high.
Your’s sincerly,
placement cell BMCC college Pune
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Activity 6:
Rewrite the above E-mail keeping in mind the pointers for a good e-mail. The e-
mail should not have more than 4 paragraphs and not more than 3 sentences per
paragraph.
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