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IELTS Ac Writing PT 13
150 words 1) Graph (bar, chart
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WRITING TASK 1 2) Maps
3) diagram
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
WRITING TASK 1
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The diagram below shows the stages and equipment used in the process of making
matches.
The diagram below
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shows the stages and equipment used in the process of making matches.
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Making matches
Write at least 150 words.
Write at least 150 words.
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WRITING TASK 1
MODEL RESPONSE ↓ ↑
The diagram shows that the process of manufacturing matches has several stages.(The matchsticks
are first cut, prepared, dried and moved to a storage area. After that, they are dipped into several
chemicals and dried before being packaged.&& first half & second half
In the first phase, a log of wood is placed in a peeler and rotated, while a flat blade peels a long, thin
sheet of wood, called veneer, from the outer surface of the log. The veneer proceeds to the chopper,
which cuts it into small sticks. These are then soaked in a vat of ammonium phosphate. Afterwards,
they are placed in a large, rotating drum. From there, the matches are dumped into a hopper and
blown through a metal duct to the storage area. & first half
In the next stage, the sticks are moved from the storage area and they fall into a funnel-shaped
device which lines them up to be inserted into holes on a long, continuous, perforated steel belt.
As the belt moves along, the tips of the matches are dipped in a series of three tanks holding firstly
paraffin wax, then base chemicals and finally tip chemicals. Next, the belt loops up and down through
a drying area. In the final step of the process, the matches are packaged.
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MODEL RESPONSE FEEDBACK
IELTS examiners rate the IELTS Writing Task 1 using 4 assessment criteria - Task Achievement, Coherence and
Cohesion, Lexical Resource and Grammatical Range and Accuracy. Below you’ll find feedback on this sample
model response.
1. Task Achievement: What are the main stages of making matches? Is there a summary of these stages anywhere
in the response?
The first paragraph gives a general summary of the stages, which are then described in detail in the next two
paragraphs.
2. Coherence and Cohesion: Is the response easy to follow because of paragraphing and cohesive devices?
There are three paragraphs here, the second two introduced by clear transitions: “In the first phase”, “In the next
stage”.
The paragraphs correspond to the main stages presented in the diagram and there are a variety of transitions
within the paragraphs. “These” “Afterwards, they” “From there”,
The response is easy to follow.
3. Lexical Resource: Is there a variety of vocabulary, some from the prompt, but other vocabulary not from the
prompt? Are words spelled correctly and used correctly?
Words from the prompt are integrated well into the response and there are no spelling errors. Some words not
from the prompt: “manufacturing”, “matchsticks”, “first phase”, “vat”.
Vocabulary is used with precision and there is a wide range.
4. Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Are there a variety of sentence structures and are they accurate? Is
punctuation accurate? “The matches are first cut”, “…proceeds to the chopper, which cuts it…”, “the sticks are moved…”
There are a variety of sentence structures, and there are no errors. Punctuation is accurate.
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WRITING TASK 2
You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. ③2frrainst
Write about the following topic:
Lack of fresh water is becoming a global issue of increasing importance.
What problems does this shortage cause?
What measures could be taken to overcome these problems?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or
experience.
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WRITING TASK 2
MODEL RESPONSE
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Water scarcity is becoming a Csignificant global problem>with&far-reaching effects. Long-term solutions
require extensive government intervention in programmes, including research and climate mitigation
measures, but individuals also need to become aware of the need for water conservation.
ASmajor problem for all countries&is the huge amount of water necessary for agriculture and industry.
When there is insufficient water, crops fail, animals die and people go hungry. Without an adequate
water supply, manufacturers, food producers, mining operations and businesses cannot succeed.
Ultimately, water is the key to economic prosperity. &
Water shortages create particular difficulties in developing countries. Firstly, many women and
children in these countries have to spend the whole day walking to and from a remote water source
to fetch water. Consequently, these children miss school and often do not receive an adequate
education. Secondly, the water that is available for daily use may be contaminated, and this can lead
to illness and even death. &
One of the most important long-term solutions to this problem is to work towards reducing global
warming and climate change, as dry regions are becoming drier across the planet. Additionally,
pollution of waterways needs to be addressed, as we take steps to clean up our existing supplies of
this precious resource. Many old-fashioned irrigation schemes are generally very wasteful, so funds
need to be available for research into water conservation and new irrigation technologies. These
technologies could then be transferred to developing nations. At an individual level, we need to
become aware of wasteful water-use habits, such as watering lawns in the summer, or pouring our
grey water down the drain. In conclusion, the inadequate supply of fresh water is one of the most
crucial environmental problems facing our planet, and we need to work to preserve this precious
resource. &
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MODEL RESPONSE FEEDBACK
IELTS examiners rate the IELTS Writing Task 1 using 4 assessment criteria - Task Response, Coherence
and Cohesion, Lexical Resource and Grammatical Range and Accuracy. Below you’ll find feedback on this
sample model response.
1. Task Response: Are all parts of the prompt addressed, a position taken and supported and is the
response in an essay format?
All parts of the prompt are addressed and appropriate examples given. Problems described in the
second paragraph are related to economic prosperity in general, while in the third paragraph the
problems described are related more directly to developing countries.
Solutions are suggested in the third paragraph and a succinct conclusion is given at the end.
This is in an appropriate essay format.
2. Coherence and Cohesion: Is the response easy to follow because of appropriate paragraphing, range
and accuracy of cohesive devices, and referencing?
There are five paragraphs here. The first serves as an introduction, the second, third, and fourth as
body paragraphs, and the last as a conclusion.
The introduction presents the idea of water scarcity, effects, and the idea of long-term solutions
requiring both government and individual action. Each body paragraph is well-organized and ideas
can easily be followed. The second paragraph begins, “A major problem”, then “When there is insufficient
water”, then “Without an adequate water supply”, then “Ultimately…”
The fourth paragraph, which covers solutions is easy to follow. “One of the most important …”,
“Additionally”, “as we take steps...”, “These technologies could then…”, “At an individual level…”
Both overall organization of paragraphs and internal organization is clear and a range of discourse
markers is used accurately.
3. Lexical Resource: How wide a range of vocabulary is used and how accurate is usage and spelling?
There is a wide range of vocabulary here with no error. Less common items are used quite skillfully.
Examples: “Water scarcity”, “far-reaching effects”, “extensive government intervention”, “climate mitigation”.
4. Grammatical Range and Accuracy: How wide is the range of grammatical structures and how frequent
are errors? Is punctuation accurate?
There is a wide range of grammatical structures here with no error. Punctuation is accurate.
Examples: “Long-term solutions require extensive government intervention in programmes, including
research and climate mitigation measures, but individuals also need to become aware of the need for water
conservation.”, “…spend the whole day walking to and from a remote water source to fetch water.”, “…the water
that is available for daily use may be contaminated, and this can lead to illness and even death.”
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