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� Look at this essay title.
Does being famous have more advantages or more disadvantages?
Read this second paragraph (the paragraph after the introduction) from a student's
essay on this topic. What are the good and bad things about it?
There are many advantages of being famous. If you are famous,
you might also be wealthy. You can buy a big house and an
expensive car. Another advantage is that you have fans. They
take photographs of you and send you letters. One more
advantage is if you are famous you don't have to wait in
queues. You can go to the front. The last advantage of being
famous is you can use your fame and money to help good
causes. If you give money to charity, others will do so too.
In this way, you can make a real difference in the world.
� The paragraph gives four advantages of being famous. Each point is supported by
evidence. Complete the table. The first point has been done for you.
Point Evidence
1 you might be wealthy you can buy a big house and an expensive car
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3
4
Rewrite the paragraph. Instead of always using famous and advantages, try to use
some of these words:
famous: (have) fame, well-known, someone that everyone knows
advantages: benefits, good points, positive aspects
� Read the student's next paragraph and answer the questions.
There are also disadvantages of being famous. The main one is that you do not
have a private life. Reporters follow you everywhere. Even if you are tired or sick,
they take photographs of you. *The second drawback of being well-known is that
people say bad things about you. They even tell lies about you. The third negative
aspect of fame is your family may also suffer. Even your children may have
paparazzi following them. A final problem is that it can be very stressful. Some
actors or singers are badly affected by the pressure.
1 How does the studenravoid repeating the words disadvantages and famous?
2 What are the student's FOUR main points?
3 What evidence does the student provide for each point?
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It is also good to give specific examples for some of your points.
For example, 'Many celebrities have got into trouble after
getting angry with reporters and photographers who were
following them' could be added at* to support the first point in
the student's second paragraph.
� Where in the paragraph could you add these sentences?
1 Even people like Bill Gates, who gives most of his money to
charity, are criticised!
2 Many famous people have become ill due to overwork and
always being in public view.
3 For example, everyone has seen pictures of Harper,
the young daughter of David and Victoria Beckham.
l2IzD Add specific support to these points. The person or situation can be
from your own country.
Famous people are often rich. You wHI get more marks if you give
specific examples to support your
You might have a lot of fans.
points. It can be something that
You will be able to use your fame and money to help others. happened to you or a friend,
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something you read or something
that happens in your country. Make
GRAMMAR FOCUS: PRONOUNS sure it provides evidence of the
point you are making.
@ Using pronouns is a way of avoiding repetition.
Examples
Lionel Messi is a famous footbaUer. LionelMe:s:si / He plays for Barcelona and Argentina.
I can think of many drawbacks. The first dra..baek / one is the cost.
@Im Replace the repeated words. with pronouns.
1 Fan Bingbing is a popular actress
in China. Fan Bingbing starred in
My Fair Princess.
2 Benedict Cumberbatch is one of my
heroes. I met Benedict
Cumberbatch when I was in London.
3 Our country has laws that protect
people from paparazzi. Some
countries' laws are not as strict as
our laws.
4 There are some reasons for my
opinion. The first reason for my
opinion is it is difficult to be famous.
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Re�� the essay title. Which of the stat
ements a-d below best matches you
opm,on on the essay topic? r
There should be strict laws banning 'To what extent do you agree
people from taking photographs of or disagree?' means 'How
people under '18 in order to protect
young celebrities and the children strongly do you agree or
celebrities. To what extent do you of
agree or disagree? disagree?' Use phrases like
I strongly agree, or I tend to
a I strongly agree. Laws must be disagree.
very strict to protect children.
b I tend to agree. It is probably not
a good idea to allow photos of
children.
c I tend to disagree. I think people
are interested in seeing photos of
famous children.
d I strongly disagree. People have
the right to take pictures of
whoever they want.
[!IQD Read the essay and answer the
questions about it that follow.
1 What is the writer's opinion?
2 What three pieces of specific
support does the writer give?
3 Does the writer consider the All children have the right to a normal childhood. On the other hand,
everyone is interested in child stars and the children of celebrities.
opposite opinion?
Overall, I agree that it is more important to protect children, so we
4 These are all possible plans should not allow people to take photographs of people under 18.
for this essay. Which one has It is true that people are interested in seeing photos of famous
the writer used? children. They want to see if they look like their celebrity parents.
The Beckham children, for example, are often in the newspapers.
Plan 1
People think the Beckham boys should play football like their father.
Opinion
Opposing argument+ why I disagree The little girl has to be perfectly dressed like her mother. In my
Opposing argument+ why I disagree opinion, this is not fair on the children. Another problem is that
Restate opinion people believe they have the right to see pictures of famous children,
particularly important ones like those of the British royal family.
Plan2
Prince William is working hard to make sure his children, Prince
Opinion
My main arguments
George and Princess Charlotte, can grow up with their privacy
Opposing arguments protected.
Restate opinion People say that 'fame has a price'. They think that if photographers
Plan3 take pictures of well-known people, that is part of the price. I disagree
General introduction with children 'paying for fame'. They didn't choose to be famous.
(no opinion) They have the right to be badly dressed or have a bad day like
Arguments for everyone else. I once saw a website called 'Celebrities with ugly kids'.
Arguments against How will those children feel when they see that website one day?
My opinion (given for the first time) In conclusion, I understand that photos of famous children sell
newspapers. However, I think such photos should be banned to
protect the children.
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