Your report is well-structured and conveys the trends effectively.

However, there are some areas

where clarity, coherence, and grammatical accuracy could be improved. Below, I’ve provided
corrections and highlighted them for better readability. I’ve also enhanced some sentences to
make your report more polished and natural.

Improved IELTS Task 1 Report with Corrections Highlighted

The table provides a breakdown of the qualifications of secondary school teachers in the years
2010, 2015, and 2020. The figures are expressed as percentages.

Overall, it is evident that the proportion of secondary school teachers with a bachelor's degree,
only a teaching certificate, or no formal qualification declined consistently over time—
except for the last category, which remained stable. In contrast, the proportion of teachers with
a postgraduate degree showed a steady increase, reaching the highest percentage in all three
periods.

Turning to the details, the proportion of teachers holding a bachelor’s degree saw a gradual
decline, falling from 38% in 2010 to 30% in 2020. Similarly, the percentage of teachers
whose only qualification was a teaching certificate, which stood at 15% in 2010, dropped by
5 percentage points over the same period. As for those without any formal qualification, their
small proportion remained unchanged at 2% throughout the period.

Meanwhile, while the other three categories of teachers showed a decline, postgraduate-
qualified teachers experienced a notable increase. Their percentage stood at 45% in 2010,
but rose to over half of all teachers by 2020, reaching 58%.

Corrections & Improvements

1. Grammar & Clarity

o Changed "maintained a consistent decline over time" → "declined consistently
over time" (more natural phrasing).
o Reworded "while the opposite was true for those with a postgraduate degree,
showing the highest percentage in all 3 periods" → "In contrast, the
proportion of teachers with a postgraduate degree showed a steady increase,
reaching the highest percentage in all three periods" for better flow.
2. Improved Phrasing
o "Relative number of teachers who had teaching certificate merely" →
"Percentage of teachers whose only qualification was a teaching certificate"
(more natural and clear).
o "Relatively small percentage of them did not show any change" → "Their
small proportion remained unchanged" (concise and clearer).
3. Enhanced Data Descriptions
o "Dropped by 5% in the same period" → "Dropped by 5 percentage points
over the same period" (more precise wording in IELTS writing).
o "This figure rose to over half of all teachers by the end of the period, at 58%"
→ "Rose to over half of all teachers by 2020, reaching 58%" (smoother
transition).
 Deep Seek

Secondary School Teacher Qualifications (2010-2020)

The table illustrates the qualifications of secondary school teachers over three years
(2010, 2015, and 2020), measured in percentages.

Overall, the proportion of teachers with postgraduate degrees increased steadily, while
the percentages of those holding bachelor’s degrees, teaching certificates only, or no
formal qualifications declined or remained stable.

Turning to the details, the most significant trend was the rise in teachers with
postgraduate qualifications. This group grew from 45% in 2010 to 58% in 2020,
surpassing all other categories by the end of the period.

In contrast, the percentage of teachers with bachelor’s degrees decreased from 38% to
30%, while those holding only a teaching certificate dropped from 15% to 10%. The
proportion of teachers with no formal qualifications remained relatively stable,
fluctuating slightly between 1% and 2%.

In conclusion, the data highlights a clear shift toward higher academic qualifications
among secondary school teachers, with postgraduate degrees becoming increasingly
prevalent over the decade.

Corrections and Improvements:

1. Grammar/Clarity Issues:

o Original: "the proportion of secondary school teachers, who had bachelor’s degree,
teaching certificate only and no formal qualification, maintained a consistent decline over
time with the third one remaining stable over time..."
o Correction: "the percentages of those holding bachelor’s degrees, teaching certificates
only, or no formal qualifications declined or remained stable."
o Reason: The original sentence was overly complex and contained unnecessary commas.
The revised version is clearer and more concise.
2. Repetition/Wordiness:
o Original: "while the opposite was true for those with postgraduate degree, showing the
highest percentage in all 3 periods."
o Correction: "while the proportion of teachers with postgraduate degrees increased
steadily."
o Reason: "Showing the highest percentage in all 3 periods" is redundant since the trend
is already clear from the data.
3. Incorrect Word Choice:

o Original: "the relative number of teachers who had teaching certificate merely..."
o Correction: "those holding only a teaching certificate..."
o Reason: "Merely" is awkward here; "only" is more natural in this context.
4. Improved Flow & Structure:

o Added a clear introduction to define the table’s purpose.

o Grouped similar trends (e.g., declining categories together) for better readability.
o Ended with a strong conclusion summarizing the key trend.

Key Takeaways for Improvement:

 Avoid run-on sentences; break them into shorter, clearer statements.

 Use active voice (e.g., "the proportion increased" instead of "there was an increase").
 Ensure parallel structure (e.g., "bachelor’s degrees, teaching certificates, or no formal
qualifications").

Your original report was already quite good, but these refinements make it more
polished and professional. Well done!

what score d u give for my report in terms of ielts writiing task 1 criteria

IELTS Writing Task 1 Band Score Estimate: 6.5 – 7.0

Here’s how your report aligns with the IELTS Writing Task 1 criteria (TA = Task
Achievement, C&C = Coherence & Cohesion, LR = Lexical Resource, GRA = Grammatical
Range & Accuracy):

Strengths:

✅ TA (Task Achievement) ~7.0

 You summarized key trends (postgraduate increase, bachelor’s decline) and included
data.
 Covered all categories, but minor inaccuracies (e.g., "no formal qualification" fluctuated
slightly, not "stable").

✅ C&C (Coherence & Cohesion) ~6.5

 Logical structure with clear paragraphs (overview → details).

 Some awkward phrasing ("the third one remaining stable") and repetition ("over time").

✅ LR (Lexical Resource) ~6.5

 Varied vocabulary (e.g., "proportion," "gradual decline," "noticeable increase").

 Minor errors ("teaching certificate merely" → "only a teaching certificate").

✅ GRA (Grammatical Range & Accuracy) ~6.5

 Mostly accurate, but complex sentences were sometimes unclear (e.g., "while the
opposite was true...").

How to Reach Band 7.0+:

1. Task Achievement:

o Avoid minor inaccuracies (e.g., "no formal qualification" was 2% → 1% → 2%, not fully
stable).
o Highlight the most significant trend first in the overview (postgraduate increase).
2. Coherence & Cohesion:

o Use linking words more naturally (e.g., "In contrast," "Similarly").

o Shorten overly long sentences (e.g., "while the opposite was true..." → "while
postgraduate qualifications rose").
3. Lexical Resource:

o Replace less precise terms ("merely" → "only," "relative number" → "proportion").

4. Grammar:

o Fix article errors ("bachelor’s degree" → "a bachelor’s degree").

o Use more complex structures accurately (e.g., "Despite the decline in X, Y increased").

Sample Band 7.0+ Version:

The table compares the qualifications of secondary school teachers in 2010, 2015, and
2020. Overall, postgraduate degrees became increasingly prevalent, rising from 45% to
58%, whereas other qualifications declined or remained steady.

*Notably, the proportion of teachers with bachelor’s degrees fell by 8%, while those
holding only teaching certificates dropped to 10%. By contrast, educators with no
formal qualifications fluctuated marginally between 1-2%.*

In conclusion, the data reveals a clear shift toward higher academic credentials among
secondary teachers over the decade.

Key Improvement: More precise, concise, and error-free.

Final Notes:

 Your current report is strong but inconsistent (some Band 7 features, but errors pull it
down to 6.5).
 Focus on clarity, accuracy, and variety to solidify a 7.0+.

Keep practicing! Your structure is already good—just polish the details. 🚀