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File Name: N4R Finding Rosalita
Narrative
Grade 4
Range of Writing
Finding Rosalita
Orients the reader by
establishing a situation and
introducing a narrator and
It was Sunday. My family and I were in France. I was as happy as a [Link]
We were driving along the road when my Daddy stopped the car. He told my
brother and sister to get out of the car to see what the furry lump on the side of Uses description to
develop events and
the road was. They got out of the car. 10 seconds later, they got back in the car show the responses
of characters to
with a very small kitten in their hands. She was about the size of a very, very, situations
very, very small baby bottle. My stomach went into my throat when I saw it
actually was a kitten. She was meowing as loud as a fog horn. It was so horrible, Uses concrete
words and phrases
I couldn’t think. Mreow. I felt horrible. I knew that I hadn’t done anything bad toand sensory
details to convey
her, but I just couldn’t help it. She was so cold. I was worried. Her claws were as experiences and
events precisely
sharp as sewing needles being pricked into your skin. I shuddered. She had crusts
over her eyes, from infections, that looked like they hurt. We were headed into
Uses a variety of
the village. Madame Sanz was there. We asked her what to do. I was afraid that transitional words and
phrases to manage the
she wouldn’t have any advice. Thankfully, she told us what to do. She told us to sequence of events
boil rose petals in water ’till they were warm and wet. Then we should pour them
into a bowl with some water and keep on rubbing then over her eyes. After that,
we decided to call the little kitten, Rosalita. We also call her other things that
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Provides a conclusion
that follows from the
sound like Rosalita, but I won’t mention that. We prayed. Luckily, she is still narrated events
with us now. Hopefully, She will be with us much, much, much, much longer.
In this fourth-grade narrative, the writer describes an experience using effective techniques,
descriptive details, and a clear event sequence that unfolds naturally. Descriptions of actions (“I
shuddered”), feelings (“I felt horrible”), and thoughts (“I knew I hadn’t done anything bad to her,
but I just couldn't help it”) help the reader identify with the narrator. Sensory details (“She had
crusts over her eyes”) add to our understanding of the situation and paint a vivid picture of the
experience. The writer controls the sequence of events with transitional words and phrases and
ends with a concluding reflection that is clearly connected to the narrated experience.
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File Name: N4R Finding Rosalita
Narrative
Grade 4
Revised and Edited for Student Use
Finding Rosalita
It was Sunday. My family and I were in France. I was as happy as a bee. We were driving along
the road when my daddy stopped the car. He told my brother and sister to get out of the car to see what
the furry lump on the side of the road was. They got out of the car. Ten seconds later, they got back in
the car with a very small kitten in their hands. She was about the size of a very, very, very, very small
baby bottle.
My stomach went into my throat when I saw it actually was a kitten. She was meowing as loud
as a foghorn. It was so horrible, I couldn’t think. Mreow. I felt horrible. I knew that I hadn’t done
anything bad to her, but I just couldn’t help it. She was so cold. I was worried. Her claws were as sharp
as sewing needles being pricked into your skin. I shuddered. She had crusts over her eyes, from
infections, that looked like they hurt.
We were headed into the village. Madame Sanz was there. We asked her what to do. I was
afraid that she wouldn’t have any advice. Thankfully, she told us what to do. She told us to boil rose
petals in water till they were warm and wet. Then we should pour them into a bowl with some water
and keep on rubbing then over the kitten’s eyes.
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After that, we decided to call the little kitten Rosalita. We also call her other things that sound
like Rosalita, but I won’t mention that. We prayed. Luckily, she is still with us now. Hopefully, she will
be with us much, much, much, much longer.
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File Name: N4R Finding Rosalita
Narrative
Grade 4
Range of Writing
Finding Rosalita
It was Sunday. My family and I were in France. I was as happy as a bee. We were driving along
the road when my Daddy stopped the car. He told my brother and sister to get out of the car to see what
the furry lump on the side of the road was. They got out of the car. 10 seconds later, they got back in
the car with a very small kitten in their hands. She was about the size of a very, very, very, very small
baby bottle. My stomach went into my throat when I saw it actually was a kitten. She was meowing as
loud as a fog horn. It was so horrible, I couldn’t think. Mreow. I felt horrible. I knew that I hadn’t done
anything bad to her, but I just couldn’t help it. She was so cold. I was worried. Her claws were as sharp
as sewing needles being pricked into your skin. I shuddered. She had crusts over her eyes, from
infections, that looked like they hurt. We were headed into the village. Madame Sanz was there. We
asked her what to do. I was afraid that she wouldn’t have any advice. Thankfully, she told us what to
do. She told us to boil rose petals in water ‘till they were warm and wet. Then we should pour them into
a bowl with some water and keep on rubbing then over her eyes. After that, we decided to call the little
kitten, Rosalita. We also call her other things that sound like Rosalita, but I won’t mention that. We
prayed. Luckily, she is still with us now. Hopefully, She will be with us much, much, much, much
longer.
File Name: N5R Frustration