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Description is not a purpose but a tool to help achieve a purpose.

For
example, description is a key part of writing that entertains such as story-
telling and poems; but it is also an important part of explanatory and
persuasive writing.

To stimulate a reader's imagination, descriptive language needs to be


focused on the senses, thus it is sometimes called sensory description.
This kind of writing is said to create imagery in the reader's mind, which
means that they are brought to feel that they can sense the thing being
described. Here are some examples of sensory description. Notice the way
each creates a sense of imagery - and also notice how certain words are
very 'expressive' in their meaning as well as the writer's use
of figurative language such as simile and metaphor.

 What can be seen?

o "His ashen face looked like he had seen the horror of horrors."

 What can be heard?

o "A sound like a thousand crashing cymbals assaulted our ears"

 What can be felt?

o "The soft gooey mass clung to my by now shivering flesh"

 What can be tasted?

o "The taste was foul: an acrid and nauseous taste of rotting flesh."

 What can be smelt?

o "The smell was beyond describable - nothing this side of Hell's gates could come close."
2. Camera Technique:

Imagine yourself to be a kind of 'human video camera'! With your


searching zoom lens you are going to 'record' what was in the particular
scene or situation the question asks you to describe:

o a selection of the 'stills' from your video will provide the


substance for what you describe;
o an effective structure is crucial to a high grade. This can be
achieved in several ways, for example, by describing each of
the 'stills' from your 'video' location by location: 'In the
corner...'; 'By the hot dog stall...'; 'In the sky...'; 'Over there...';
o other structures that work are: from inside to outside..., from
then to now..., from the 'general' to the
'particular'... Structure provides the reader with a logical
'shape' and sense of coherence.

3. Use lots of adjectives but choosing precise 'expressive'


vocabulary.

o Precise vocabulary means choosing what can be called


'muscular' words - the kind of words that almost contain their
own description and which can etch themselves into the mind
of your reader.
o Here are two examples that contain precise vocabulary. What
do you think? You could easily do the same! 'The
water gushed out of the fountain' and 'The rain spilled out
of the heavens'. This is the kind of description that gains
high marks - for more examples, click here.

PRECISE AND SENSORY DESCRIPTION

Here are some example descriptions that use precise 'muscular' vocabulary
choices as well as vivid and original similes and metaphors.

The 'muscular' sounding nouns and verbs are highlighted in red.

 The swollen mass teemed forwards like a seething colony of crawling ants.
 The mingling spices tingled our senses to create a glorious surge of appetite.
 The summer rain spilled down and soused our sweltering faces with its
refreshing coolness.
 The flashing forks of lightning flooded the land with fearful evidence of Nature's
power.
 The youngsters were like bundles of concentrated energy exploding with sheer
delight.
 The very buildings themselves seemed to bow low as the town's new football
hero approached.
 The look of flame and anger in her eyes showed the world that she was indeed a
rebel with a cause.
 The darkening heavens ushered in a forbidding, sombre mood that set the
scene for the grim news lying in wait for us.
 Our noses were assaulted by the putrefying smell of rotting flesh. It was like a
wall of evil.
 The multitude of creatures created a cacophony of calls that assaulted our
ears.
 The evening was aflame with the glorious sunset.
 The incessant trumpeting of the dying beast's cries filled their ears with sorrow.

4. You will need to use some adjectives and adverbs; but


when you use them, add them with thought and care.

o Always avoid excessive, flat or boring description, e.g.


'the luxuriously warm and golden yellow sand sparkled
brightly under the deep blue sky". This will gain low marks.
o If you do describe all of your nouns with extra adjectives the
effect is actually to weaken the description and marks will
be lost.

What strengthens description a great deal is to use


a few but carefully chosen and vivid similes and metaphors,
e.g. 'He looked like a man just back from a journey to Hell';
'Her cheeks were glowing like the ripest of ripe strawberries.'
o Notice how in each of the above two examples a
certain mood or atmosphere is also being hinted at.
o It's important to use your description to create,
develop or assist a mood suited to your subject matter
or theme. Doing this will boost your mark!

o never write in the form of a short story. The exam


question on 'Writing to Describe' requires a different
approach.
 Instead of a story simply write a short piece of purely
descriptive writing: 'zoom in' and 'focus' the lens of your
'video camera' on the kind of scene asked in the exam
question. Help your reader feel as if he or she
were actually there, experiencing the thing being
described.
 In short exam answers of this kind, again, it can be
best not to be a part of the action; instead, be merely
an observer and a reporter of the event (so... no 'I
saw...').

An Error to Avoid!

Look at the following piece of description. It contains perhaps a common problem


teachers see in students' descriptive writing. Oddly this error doesn't occur at all so
often in other kinds of writing.

The old-fashioned room surrounding me. My grandmother welcoming me.


My parents smiling at me. The visit was beginning...
Can you sense what is wrong with the above? The error is in the grammar of the first
three sentences. They don't contain full verbs and however 'active' and 'immediate'
they might appear to sound, they are not 'complete' and so are not good English.
They will lose marks. And yet so many students must think that they are full
sentences because they use similar constructions in their own descriptive writing.

This is how the above should be written. Be sure not to base any your own sentences
on bare '-ing' verbs and so avoid this trap!

The old-fashioned room surrounded me. My grandmother welcomed me.


My parents smiled at me. My weekly visit was beginning...'
PROFESSIONAL DESCRIPTION

In the following poem, Dulce et Decorum Est, Wilfred Owen certainly


uses effective description - but as you will see, that is not his
primary purpose. In professional writing, writers never describe for
the sake of describing - the description always underpins a second
purpose - often to persuade. But Owen's poem certainly contains
description at its very finest and most realistic seeming: the
dreadful images of First World War trench warfare feel as if they are
being etched onto our minds.

Owen's description relies heavily on original and vivid figurative


language to engage us and create powerful images. You will
notice how the descriptive effects work to create a realistic seeming
scene, one that helps to persuade you to accept Owen's view of
warfare. Owen's description helps you to understand the actual
experiences through which these pitiful men were forced to go.

Common questions

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Sensory description is considered a tool rather than a purpose in writing because it is used to achieve broader narrative goals, such as engaging the reader or conveying themes and moods. While it enriches the textual experience by providing vivid imagery and emotional depth, its primary function is to support the writer's purpose, whether it be entertainment, explanation, or persuasion. For example, Owen's use of sensory description in his poetry underpins his persuasive anti-war message rather than serving as an end in itself . It helps translate abstract ideas into tangible experiences that resonate with the reader .

Sensory description enhances the reader's experience by engaging their senses, thus creating vivid imagery that allows them to feel as if they can sense the described object or scene. By focusing on the senses – such as sight, sound, touch, taste, and smell – writers can evoke a more immersive and emotional response from the reader. This technique is crucial in storytelling, poetry, and explanatory writing as it helps stimulate the reader's imagination . Precise vocabulary and the use of figurative language, like similes and metaphors, further strengthen this effect by providing expressive and memorable imagery .

Description in professional writing can serve multiple purposes by underpinning broader narrative goals such as persuasion, theme reinforcement, and mood creation. While a primary role of description is to provide vivid imagery and sensory engagement, it also supports persuasive elements by shaping readers' perceptions and emotions, as seen in Wilfred Owen's poetry. His descriptive passages not only depict war's harsh realities but also reinforce his anti-war stance, using graphic imagery to evoke a visceral emotional response . Additionally, descriptions contribute to theme reinforcement by aligning sensory elements with the narrative's core message or emotional undertones .

Precise vocabulary and muscular words play a significant role in crafting effective descriptive writing by providing clarity and impact. These word choices help convey detailed images and emotions with brevity and force, allowing the reader to grasp complex scenes or feelings efficiently. Muscular words are particularly effective because they are vivid, almost containing their own descriptions, and can etch themselves into the reader's mind . This technique ensures that descriptions are not flat or excessive but instead engaging and memorable .

Figurative language contributes to the persuasive element of descriptive writing by creating strong, memorable imagery that resonates with the reader. Metaphors and similes can evoke emotions and associations that enhance the underlying message or theme. For instance, Wilfred Owen uses vivid figurative language in 'Dulce et Decorum Est' not only to depict the horrors of trench warfare but also to persuade readers of the futility and distress of war . By making the scenes more relatable and impactful, figurative language convinces readers to adopt a particular viewpoint or emotional stance .

Avoiding excessive adjectives and adverbs in descriptive writing is significant because overuse can dilute the impact of the description, making it seem less vivid and engaging. Instead, the focus should be on using a few carefully chosen, vivid similes and metaphors that enrich the imagery without overwhelming it. These techniques help create a strong mood and atmosphere while maintaining clarity and conciseness, which leads to a more powerful and effective description . Frameworks for focused and expressive vocabulary choices enhance the imagery without redundancies .

Focusing on mood development enhances descriptive writing by aligning the emotional atmosphere with the narrative's themes or objectives. It allows the writer to guide the reader's emotional response, making the scene more immersive and impactful. By using descriptions that hint at certain moods or atmospheres, such as the oppressive tension before grim news, writers can subtly influence how the reader perceives the events and characters . This emotional engagement makes the writing resonate more deeply, imbuing it with significance and enhancing reader investment in the text .

To ensure that descriptive writing does not devolve into storytelling, writers should focus on maintaining an observational perspective instead of involving narratives. Techniques include writing from a detached viewpoint, acting as an observer rather than a participant, and avoiding personal pronouns or the 'I saw' perspective. Additionally, structuring the piece with a 'video camera' technique, zooming in on specific details from an external standpoint, can help maintain pure descriptive focus . By anchoring scenes around detailed 'still' images and avoiding plot or character developments typical of storytelling, writers can retain the distinct essence of descriptive writing .

A common error highlighted in the document is the use of incomplete sentences containing only '-ing' verbs, which lack full verbs and thus fail as proper English. Although such constructions might seem active and immediate, they do not constitute complete sentences. To avoid this error, students should ensure their sentences include full verbs, completing the action described, such as 'The old-fashioned room surrounded me.' instead of 'surrounding me,' ensuring grammatical accuracy and clarity .

To create coherence in descriptive writing, authors can employ several structural strategies. One approach is to use a 'camera technique,' where the writer acts as a human video camera, recording scenes or situations through a series of 'stills.' These stills can be presented in a structured way, such as location-by-location descriptions, moving from inside to outside, past to present, or from general to particular . Additionally, crafting a logical progression and maintaining consistent thematic focus can provide a coherent framework, allowing the description to flow naturally and be more accessible to the reader .

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