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Marketing Improvement Suggestions

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EXAMPLE 1

XXXXXX

Hey Daniella,

This is good news and bad. I hope you don't


mind.

Slipstream IT came on my radar while on a


call with a client in the life sciences space.

And I was quite dissatisfied.

For two reasons:


1. I felt you had a great solution but it was
communicated poorly
2. I signed up to your newsletter, no emails.
It made me wonder how much you could be
leaving on the table

But I'm more than just a disappointed whiner.

I went ahead and drafted 3 core shifts your


marketing can make that would at minimum
double revenue over the next year

At minimum double.

If you'd like to see it, l'd send over a short


video and you can check it out

It's sharp and to the point.

And I also expose a few key things from your


competitors like COESUS and others that you
can take advantage of to grow.

It's nothing bogus.


Just reply this message with YES, and I'll
send it to you.

XXXX


EXAMPLE 2

I saw your results, and beyond being


impressed, I think I can help you fine tune
your process.

I made a video…
Watch it here.

Not saying I'm gonna make you a billionaire,


but if it can move the needle just a little bit,
why not if not?

This of course is an unsolicited message. Lol.

Totally free.

Just reply this message with YES, and I'll


send it to you.

XXXX

EXAMPLE 3

XYX
I subscribed to your newsletter and got no
emails for a whole week.

I am shocked.

Don't get me wrong. I think you've built


something magnificent here, but it gets me
wondering…

Do you even care how much money you're


leaving on the table?

Anyway, I'm more than just a disappointed


whiner. I went ahead and crafted 3 email
templates for your brand.

I am attaching them here so you can use


them and see how they perform.
You don't have to reply. Unless of course you
love the results.

I got more where this came from.


Best regards.

XXXX
(Everly not minding my business
-especially if it's email)

EXAMPLE 4

I’m surprised I didn’t send this earlier. But last


week was crazy busy so l get it.

Hi {First-Name}.
I saw your W-post in the
men's group. And I like the balance you bring
through the last post with family.

Ok. Actually, | couldn’t care less about men


posting Ws about "finding love".

I'm just excited at your own journey and


especially, the new one you're planning.

If you need any advice or help with setting up


the online system (funnels, website, emails,
especially copywriting), feel free to drop a
message.

I'll be glad to be part of your success story.

Cheers.

-XXXX
EXAMPLE 5

Hey Sven, I loved your W-post.

Write a book, maybe?

The work is cut out for you already. Each


point is a chapter.

I'll help. I feel I won't regret it.

Dead serious.

-XXXX
EXAMPLE 6

Hey!

I rewrote your email just for the fun of it.

I loved it so much, but then I saw a new angle


you may have missed.

Would you like to try it with your list, some


time?

It’s free. I’m just having fun not minding my


business.

But I think you’ll love it.


EXAMPLE 7

Just read your book, Nick

I'll tell you what, I loved your intro. It set the


tone for the whole book for me

In my head I was thinking:

"Did this guy just get his jet hijacked like in a


movie scene and not panic?"

Haha, the fact that you kept it a secret from


the journalists shows you were in charge and
even greater emotional intelligence.
Would make a great movie, just saying...

Anyways, I do have a question Nick

Having seen who you are from your book, I


needed to ask:

Why is your website different?

It’s like there is this legend inside the book...


and the web page does not communicate
even half of that energy...

That superhuman quality is not just there


I mean, as a copywriter, I can see it

And I don’t know how well that page


generates leads or sales for you, but if it is
not satisfactory, I am telling you this is why -
the energy on that landing page is not just
there.

Maybe you hired a web designer instead of a


copywriter, that’s why it’s like that.

But everything on that page, especially the


words above the fold, could have done a lot
better.
I’m just saying.

I’m a friend, I read your book, I love your


book, I’d love to help you if you need me to
help you point out these things in more detail
- things that we can fix on the website,
absolutely free of charge.

If you’d like that, I’m available.

Consider this as my little way of saying thank


you for such a great book.

Keep winning champ.

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