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Final Project: Paragraph Writing

Task Identity
 Course Name: Paragraph Writing
 Study Program: English Education (TBI)
 Semester: 3rd
 Submission Deadline: December 10, 2024
 File Format: PDF (Font: Times New Roman, size 12 pt, spacing 1.5, margin 2.5 cm)

Descriptive Paragraph
Assignment Instructions
1. Type of Task:
o Write a descriptive paragraph of 150-200 words.
o The paragraph should clearly describe a specific place, object, or moment so the
reader can vividly imagine it.
2. Steps to Complete the Assignment:
o Choose an interesting topic that can be described in detail, such as:
 A Hidden Gem in in My Hometown
 My Favorite Online Game
 A Memorable Day at the Beach
o Ensure that your paragraph includes:
 A clear topic and main idea.
 Descriptive details (use the five senses: sight, sound, smell, taste, and
touch).
 Relevant supporting sentences that are well-organized.
 A concluding sentence that reinforces the description.
o Avoid word repetition and ensure appropriate grammar and vocabulary use.
3. Assignment Format:
o The paragraph must be typed neatly using the following format:
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 Font: Times New Roman, size 12 pt.

 Spacing: 1.5.
 Margin: 2.5 cm on all sides.
4. Assessment Criteria:
o Topic and main idea clarity: 20%
o Descriptive details: 30%
o Paragraph organization: 20%
o Grammar and vocabulary usage: 20%
o Creativity and originality: 10%
5. Submission Process:
o Submit the assignment as a Word or PDF document via [specify the platform,
e.g., Google Classroom] no later than December 15, 2024, at 11:59 PM.
o File naming format: Name_NIM_FinalProject_ParagraphWriting (example:
Dina_21001234_FinalProject_ParagraphWriting).
6. Plagiarism Policy:
o The assignment must be original and written individually. Any plagiarism
exceeding 20% will result in a score of 0.

7. Peer Review Rubric just for Descriptive Paragraphs

Criteria Excellent Good Satisfactory Needs Poor

(5) (4) (3) Improvement (1)
(2)
Topic & The topic is The topic is The topic is The topic is No clear
Main Idea very clear, clear, and the somewhat unclear or topic or main
and the main idea is clear, but the lacks a main idea is
paragraph developed main idea idea. presented.
strongly well. needs more
focuses on development.
the main
idea.
Descriptive Uses vivid Includes Some Few or No
Details and sensory appropriate descriptive unclear descriptive
details that and effective details are descriptive details; the
create a details but included but details are paragraph is
clear lacks do not create used, and the vague or
picture. vividness in a strong picture is confusing.
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Criteria Excellent Good Satisfactory Needs Poor

(5) (4) (3) Improvement (1)
(2)
some parts. image. incomplete.
Organization Paragraph is Paragraph is Structure is Poor No
very well- organized with basic; some organization; organization;
structured a clear sentences sentences and the
with a clear structure but feel out of ideas are paragraph is
beginning, transitions place or scattered or chaotic and
middle, and could be disconnected. hard to difficult to
end. smoother. follow. follow.
Vocabulary Uses a Vocabulary is Vocabulary Vocabulary is Inappropriate
variety of appropriate is simple and very basic, or
descriptive with some lacks variety; and some insufficient
and precise descriptive some words word choices vocabulary
words words, though may not fit are incorrect used; very
effectively. repetitive at well. or unclear. limited
times. language.
Grammar & Very few or Some minor Several Frequent Numerous
Mechanics no errors in errors that do noticeable grammar, errors that
grammar, not interfere errors that punctuation, make the
punctuation, with occasionally or spelling paragraph
and understanding. make it hard errors that difficult to
spelling. to affect understand.
understand. meaning.
Creativity & The The paragraph The The paragraph No creativity
Engagement paragraph is is interesting paragraph is is dull and or effort; the
highly but could use somewhat shows paragraph is
engaging more interesting minimal uninteresting
and unique; creativity or but lacks creativity or and
it captures engaging originality or effort to disengaging.
the reader’s elements. engagement. engage the
interest reader.
well.

How Students Can Use the Rubric for Peer Review:

1. Score Each Criterion: Assign a score from 1 to 5 for each criterion.
2. Provide Comments:
Topic & Main Idea
 Positive Comment (Excellent/Good):
o Your topic is very clear, and the paragraph stays focused on describing the train
perfectly. The main idea is easy to understand.
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o I liked how your paragraph had a clear topic, but you could make the topic
sentence a bit stronger to grab attention.
 Constructive Suggestion (Satisfactory/Needs Improvement):
o Your topic is clear, but the main idea feels a little scattered. Try to focus more on
one key aspect, like the train's interior.
o It’s hard to tell what the main idea is. Consider starting with a stronger topic
sentence that introduces the train’s importance.
Descriptive Details
 Positive Comment (Excellent/Good):
o You used excellent sensory details like ‘flickering lights’ and ‘peeling
advertisements.’ It really paints a picture!
o The description is good, especially the part about the scuffed floors. Adding more
sensory details, like smell or sound, could make it even better.
 Constructive Suggestion (Satisfactory/Needs Improvement):
o There are some details, but they feel general. Try adding more sensory words
(e.g., how it smells, sounds, or feels) to make the scene vivid.
o The description is minimal, and it’s hard to imagine the scene. Focus on specific
details, like the train’s seats or lighting.
Organization
 Positive Comment (Excellent/Good):
o Your paragraph flows smoothly from the exterior of the train to the interior. The
transitions between ideas are clear.
o The organization is good, but some transitions could be smoother. For example,
you could connect the description of the seats to the walls more naturally.
 Constructive Suggestion (Satisfactory/Needs Improvement):
o The sentences feel disconnected. Try using transition words like ‘next’ or ‘in
addition’ to link ideas together.
o The structure is unclear. You could organize the paragraph by describing the
outside first and then moving inside.
Vocabulary
 Positive Comment (Excellent/Good):
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o Great use of descriptive words like ‘metallic’ and ‘sterile.’ It really helps me
picture the train.
o Your word choice is appropriate, but you used ‘dim light’ twice. Try varying your
vocabulary to keep it interesting.
 Constructive Suggestion (Satisfactory/Needs Improvement):
o Some words, like ‘utilitarian,’ might be too advanced or unclear for readers.
Consider simpler alternatives like ‘useful.’
o The vocabulary feels repetitive, and some words don’t fit well. Try using a
thesaurus to find more precise words.
Grammar & Mechanics
 Positive Comment (Excellent/Good):
o Your grammar is very strong, with almost no mistakes. I noticed just one small
error with punctuation, but it doesn’t affect understanding.
o There are a few minor errors, but overall, your grammar is clear and easy to
follow.
 Constructive Suggestion (Satisfactory/Needs Improvement):
o You have a few grammar mistakes, like tense shifts between past and present. Try
to keep the tense consistent throughout the paragraph.
o There are several grammar and spelling errors that make some sentences hard to
understand. Reread your work carefully or use a grammar-checking tool.
Creativity & Engagement
 Positive Comment (Excellent/Good):
o Your paragraph is very engaging! I loved how you made the train feel like an
important part of the city’s daily life.
o Your writing is creative, but adding a unique detail, like a memorable sound or
smell of the train, could make it even more engaging.
 Constructive Suggestion (Satisfactory/Needs Improvement):
o The paragraph is descriptive, but it feels a little flat. Try adding something
surprising or unique to capture the reader’s interest.
o The writing is plain and doesn’t stand out. Think about how you can make the
description more exciting or personal.
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Sample Overall Feedback (Combining All Aspects)

 You did a great job describing the train’s appearance and importance! Your topic is clear,
and the details help me imagine the scene. However, the organization could be smoother,
and some sentences could use transition words. Also, watch out for tense changes and
repetitive words. Adding more sensory details, like smells or sounds, would make it even
more engaging.
3. Total Score: Add the scores and share them with the writer. Provide specific feedback to
help them improve

Narrative Paragraph
Instructions:
1. Choose Your Moment:
Reflect on your life and select a moment that has had a lasting impact. This could be a
personal achievement, a life-changing experience, or a turning point that made you grow
or see the world differently.
2. Focus on Details:
Use sensory details (what you saw, heard, felt, smelled, or tasted) to bring the moment to
life. Create a vivid picture for your reader, helping them feel like they were there with
you.
3. Structure Your Story:
o Introduction:
Start by briefly introducing the moment. What made it memorable? Set the scene
for your reader.
o Body:
Describe the event in detail. What happened, who was involved, and what were
your thoughts or feelings during the moment? Highlight how you overcame
challenges or felt transformed by the experience.
o Conclusion:
Reflect on how this moment has shaped you. What lessons did you learn? How
did this experience change you, or what do you carry forward from it?
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4. Use Dialogue (Optional):

If applicable, include dialogue to show how others interacted with you during the event.
This adds depth to the narrative.
5. Make it Personal:
Your voice and emotions should come through in the writing. Let your reader connect
with the experience by showing, not just telling, how this moment was meaningful.

Narrative Writing Rubric Evaluation

Criteria Excellent (4) Good (3) Satisfactory (2) Needs
Improvement
(1)
Content and The narrative is The narrative is The narrative is The narrative
Ideas deeply meaningful and somewhat lacks clear
meaningful and the moment is meaningful, with meaning or
the moment is described well, limited reflection. purpose. The
described vividly with some Ideas are reflection is weak
with clear, reflection. somewhat unclear or absent.
insightful Ideas are or
reflection. The mostly clear. underdeveloped.
ideas are original
and engaging.
Organization The story is well- The story is The structure is The structure is
organized with a organized with somewhat unclear unclear, making
clear beginning, a clear or lacking in the narrative
middle, and end. structure, logical difficult to
The events flow though some progression. follow.
logically, and transitions may Transitions may
transitions are feel abrupt. be weak.
smooth.
Sensory The narrative uses The narrative Few sensory The narrative
Detail & rich sensory includes some details are lacks sensory
Description details (sight, sensory details, included, and the details and feels
sound, touch, making the moment lacks flat or
taste, smell) that moment mostly vividness or underdeveloped.
make the moment vivid, but could depth.
come alive for the benefit from
reader. more depth.
Character The writer’s The writer’s Emotions and Emotions and
Development emotions and emotions are personal growth personal growth
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Criteria Excellent (4) Good (3) Satisfactory (2) Needs

Improvement
(1)
reflections are mostly clear, are unclear or are not evident or
clear and well- with some underdeveloped. underdeveloped.
expressed. The reflection on The writer’s
writer shows personal transformation is
significant growth. not well
personal growth expressed.
or transformation.
Voice and The writer’s voice The writer’s The voice is The voice is
Style is strong and voice is clear, somewhat unclear weak or unclear,
authentic, with but may not be or inconsistent, and language
engaging and as strong or and the language does not engage
effective consistent. is basic or the reader.
language. The Language is repetitive.
tone fits the effective, with
subject and a mostly
audience appropriate
perfectly. tone.
Grammar, Nearly flawless Few minor Some grammar, Frequent
Spelling, & grammar, errors in spelling, or grammar,
Mechanics spelling, and grammar, punctuation errors spelling, or
punctuation. spelling, or that impact clarity. punctuation
Excellent punctuation. Sentence structure errors that hinder
sentence structure Sentence is basic. readability.
and word choice. structure is
good.
Reflection The reflection on The reflection The reflection is The reflection is
and Impact the moment is is clear and vague or missing, unclear,
profound and thoughtful, underdeveloped. or superficial. No
well-developed, with some Personal growth is personal growth
showing clear consideration only briefly is shown.
personal growth of personal mentioned.
or a change in growth or
perspective. change.

Scoring:
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 Excellent (28-24 points): The narrative is exceptional with clear, vivid descriptions and
strong personal reflection.
 Good (23-17 points): The narrative is solid but may lack some depth or clarity in
reflection or sensory details.
 Satisfactory (16-10 points): The narrative meets basic requirements but lacks depth in
content, description, or reflection.
 Needs Improvement (9-0 points): The narrative does not effectively convey the
moment, lacks reflection, or has significant issues with organization or writing quality.
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Final Project: Paragraph Writing

 Course Name : Paragraph Writing
 Study Program : English Education (TBI)
 Semester : 3rd
 Name : …
 Student’ No : …

Example

Descriptive Paragraph
A Quiet Gesture of Kindness

On a crowded train, Keanu Reeves quietly exemplifies kindness, creating a subtle but
powerful impact. As the train filled with commuters, he noticed a woman standing nearby and
stood up without hesitation, gesturing to offer her his seat. His calm voice and gentle smile
softened the noise and movement around them, while the woman’s face lit up with gratitude. The
quiet hum of the train and his warm gaze made the moment feel intimate and genuine, as if he
brought a sense of calm to the entire space. Like a soft breeze in the rush of a bustling crowd,
Keanu’s thoughtful act created a ripple of warmth, leaving everyone feeling a little more at ease
in their commute.

Here is the structure of the paragraph

Topic Sentence
Keanu Reeves quietly exemplifies kindness on a crowded train, creating a subtle but powerful
impact.

Supporting Details
 As the train filled with commuters, he noticed a woman standing nearby and stood up without
hesitation, gesturing to offer her his seat.
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 His calm voice and gentle smile softened the noise and movement around them, while the
woman’s face lit up with gratitude.
 The quiet hum of the train and his warm gaze made the moment feel intimate and genuine, as
if he brought a sense of calm to the entire space.
Theme/Mood
Like a soft breeze in the rush of a bustling crowd, Keanu’s thoughtful act created a ripple of
warmth, leaving everyone feeling a little more at ease in their commute.
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Peer Reviewer: (Complete Name/NIM)

Criteria Score Comments/ Improvements

1-5 feedbacks
First Draft Final Draft
Topic & Main Idea See samples above
(included in the
instructions)

Descriptive Details

Organization

Vocabulary

Grammar &
Mechanics

Creativity &
Engagement
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Narrative Paragraph
Example (based on my experience)
Growing up, I was the shy kid who barely spoke. I hid behind my books, excelling in
class and consistently taking the top rank, but communication felt like an insurmountable wall.
Everything shifted when I was chosen to compete in the Lomba Pemasyarakatan dan
Pembudayaan Pancasila (LP2P4), a prestigious national event promoting the philosophy of
Pancasila. I joined the P4 simulation category, where we had to analyze real-life problems
through the lens of Pancasila, laws, and societal norms.

The preparation was grueling. I devoured books on Pancasila and legal regulations, my
nights spent with them as my faithful companions. My coach saw my potential but also my
glaring weakness—my inability to speak confidently. "Knowledge alone isn’t enough," he told
me, and so began an intense journey. He drilled me tirelessly, teaching me how to organize my
thoughts, modulate my voice, and deliver my ideas with clarity and conviction. Smiling, even
when nerves threatened to paralyze me, became my shield. Late into the night, I would ride my
motorbike home, the cool night air brushing against my face as I passed silent streets where the
city had already fallen into slumber. The stillness of the empty roads felt like a world apart from
the whirlwind of effort and determination I carried within me.

Looking back, I owe so much to my coach. He didn’t just see my strengths and
weaknesses—he believed in my potential and fought with unwavering patience to help me
perfect my skills and conquer my fears. His relentless encouragement and guidance turned me
into someone I never thought I could be. He taught me not just how to win, but how to grow. I
often think about how he changed my life and how much I want to follow in his footsteps. One
day, I hope to inspire and guide others the way he inspired me, helping them find their voice and
believe in themselves.

Finally, the day came. My hands trembled as I stepped onto the stage, but I held on to the
countless hours of preparation. I spoke with a confidence I never knew I had, and when they
announced my name as the winner—district, province, and eventually national level—it felt
surreal. The prize money allowed me to buy my first motorbike, but the real reward was
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something far greater. That moment broke the chains of my shyness and gave me a voice, a
confidence, and a belief in myself that I carry to this day. It wasn’t just a competition; it was the
moment I became the person I was always meant to be.

Structure of the paragraph

Introduction:
 Set the scene of the narrator as a shy, introverted person who excels academically but
struggles with communication.
 Introduce the turning point: being chosen for the Lomba Pemasyarakatan dan
Pembudayaan Pancasila (LP2P4) competition.
Body (Challenges and Preparation):
 Intense Preparation: Focus on the hard work, studying Pancasila and legal regulations late
into the night.
 Coach’s Role: Acknowledge the coach’s impact in recognizing weaknesses, providing
guidance, and building confidence.
 Struggles and Effort: Describe the emotional and physical journey, especially the late-night
motorbike rides home, symbolizing perseverance.
Climax (The Competition):
 The moment of truth: stepping onto the stage, feeling nervous, but delivering a confident
performance after the extensive preparation.
Resolution (Outcome and Reflection):
 Victory and Transformation: Winning at district, provincial, and national levels.
 Personal Growth: Reflect on the deeper transformation of overcoming shyness, finding
confidence, and gaining belief in oneself.
 Gratitude for the Coach: Emphasize the gratitude toward the coach and the desire to
inspire others the same way.