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Foreign Investment Trends in India & China

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The bar chart shows the amount of foreign direct investment in India and China from 2014 to

2019.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make
comparisons where relevant.

Sample Answer 1:
The chart illustrates the level of outside investment in the economics of India and China
between 2014 and 2019.
Overall, expenditure in China declined steadily throughout the period but fluctuated in India.
Despite this, the total amount of money that flowed into China was higher than in India.
The Chinese economy received just under $80 billion in 2014, which fell to around $60
billion in 2015 and 2016. After a slight decrease in 2017, there was a massive resurgence to a
high point of more than $100 billion in 2018 before receding to just over $40 billion in 2019.
In 2014, foreign outlays into India’s economy reached more than $20 billion, then rose
significantly to approximately $60 billion in 2015 and 2016 before falling back to 2014 levels
in 2017. In 2018, there was another dramatic increase to just below $60 billion, before
returning to around $20 billion in 2019. 2015 was the only year India’s levels of foreign
investment exceeded China’s, with values of slightly over $60 billion and slightly under $60
billion, respectively.
(175 words)
Overall Band Score
8.0
(+/- 0.5)
Vocabulary Complexity:
C1 - Intricate
Strive to incorporate even richer and more precise language.

Grammar Mistakes: 4
Vocabulary Repetition:
billion: 10
china: 3
before: 3
Try using synonyms for the above words

Task Response
8.0
The report provides a good overview of the main features of the data and makes
relevant comparisons. There is a minor omission in the report, but it is not
significant enough to affect the overall score.
Coherence & Cohesion
8.0
The report is well-organized and easy to follow. The paragraphs are well-
structured and the information flows smoothly.
Lexical Resource
8.0
The report uses a wide range of vocabulary accurately and appropriately. There
is some repetition of words and phrases, but this does not detract from the overall
quality of the report.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy
7.0
The report demonstrates a good command of grammar and punctuation.
However, there are a few minor errors that could be corrected.

The diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles.
Sample Answer 1:
The illustration depicts how plastic bottles are recycled.
Overall, the 9-step cycle begins with people putting plastic bottles into bins and ends with the
production of new products. This is achieved by turning plastic bottles back into raw
materials that can be turned into a range of plastic commercial goods.
The process starts with the placement of plastic containers into specialised bins, which are
then collected by bin lorries. They are then transported to a processing plant to be sorted by
hand. When they have been correctly sorted, they can be compressed into blocks of plastic
bottles.
At step 5, the bottles are crushed, and the resulting fragments drop into a ligquid so that they
can be washed. The substance is then placed into a machine producing plastic pellets that can
then be heated to produce the raw material. This can then be manufactured into various goods
that contain plastic and the process commences again.
(155 words)

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarize
the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Sample Answer 1:
The illustration depicts how sugar is produced from sugar canes.
Overall, this 7-step process spans over a 12- to 18-month period, beginning with the
plantation and harvest of sugar canes and ending with the making of sugar. This is achieved
by breaking sugar canes into crystals that can be processed into sugar.
To begin with, sugar canes are cultivated over 12 to 18 months to maturity for collecting,
which can be done either by machinery or manual labor. Subsequently, the chosen canes are
taken to a processing plant in step 3.
At there, the materials are put into a machine and crushed into juice, followed by the
purification stage in which limestone is removed from it. The substance is then put into a pot
where it can be heated to evaporate steam and becomes syrup, before undergoing through the
centrifuge process in which sugar crystals are taken out. When they have been correctly
separated, the crystals can be dried and cooled to transform into sugar.
(165 words)

Overall Band Score


6.0
(+/- 0.5)
Vocabulary Complexity:
B2 - Upper Intermediate
Opt for even more advanced words when appropriate.

Grammar Mistakes: 10
Vocabulary Repetition:
sugar: 8
canes: 4
crystals: 3
which: 3
Try using synonyms for the above words

Task Response
7.0
The report provides a good overview of the process, but could be more detailed
in its comparisons. For example, it could mention the difference between manual
and mechanical harvesting.
Coherence & Cohesion
5.5
The report is generally well-organized, but there are some minor issues with
sentence structure and flow. The use of 'at there' in the third paragraph is
awkward and could be improved.
Lexical Resource
6.5
The report uses a good range of vocabulary, but could be more precise in its
language. For example, 'substance' could be replaced with a more specific term
like 'sugar juice'.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy
5.5
The report contains a few grammatical errors, which affect the overall clarity and
fluency. For example, the phrase 'before undergoing through the centrifuge
process' is grammatically incorrect.
Sample Answer 2:
The illustration depicts how sugar is produced from sugar canes.
Overall, this 7-step process spans over a 12- to 18-month period, beginning with the planting
and harvest of sugar canes and ending with the making of sugar. This is achieved by breaking
sugar canes into crystals that can be processed into sugar.
To begin with, sugar canes are cultivated over 12 to 18 months to maturity for collecting,
which can be done either by machinery or manual labor. Subsequently, the harvested canes
are taken to a processing plant in step 3.
There, the materials are put into a machine and crushed into juice, followed by the
purification stage in which limestone is removed from it. The substance is then put into a pot
where it can be heated to evaporate water and becomes syrup, before undergoing the
centrifuge process in which sugar crystals are extracted. When they have been properly
separated, the crystals can be dried and cooled to transform into sugar.
(162 words)

Sample Answer 3:
The illustration depicts the process of sugar production from sugar canes. This 7-step process
spans a period of 12 to 18 months. It starts with the planting and harvesting of sugar canes
and ends with the production of sugar by breaking down the canes into crystals that are
further processed into sugar.

Initially, sugar canes are grown over a 12 to 18-month period until they reach maturity for
harvesting, which can be done using machinery or manual labor. The harvested canes are then
transported to a processing plant for further steps in the process.

At the processing plant, the canes are crushed into juice in a machine. The juice then
undergoes a purification stage to remove impurities such as limestone. Next, the juice is
heated in a pot to evaporate water and form a syrup, followed by a centrifuge process to
extract sugar crystals. Once separated, the crystals are dried and cooled to produce sugar.
Overall Band Score
8.0
(+/- 0.5)
Vocabulary Complexity:
B2 - Upper Intermediate
Opt for even more advanced words when appropriate.

Grammar Mistakes: 1
Vocabulary Repetition:
sugar: 7
canes: 6
process: 3
crystals: 3
juice: 3
Try using synonyms for the above words

Task Response
8.0
The report provides a clear and accurate summary of the main
features of the process. It also makes some relevant
comparisons, such as between manual and mechanical
harvesting. The report could be improved by including more
specific details about the process, such as the types of
machines used or the specific methods of purification.
Coherence & Cohesion
7.5
The report is well-organized and easy to follow. The paragraphs
are well-structured and the information flows smoothly from one
to the next. The report could be improved by using more
cohesive devices, such as transition words, to connect the ideas
more clearly.
Lexical Resource
7.5
The report uses a wide range of vocabulary, including some
more sophisticated terms, such as 'centrifuge' and 'evaporate'.
The vocabulary is used accurately and appropriately. The report
could be improved by using even more precise and varied
vocabulary.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy
8.5
The report demonstrates a wide range of grammatical
structures and uses them accurately and appropriately. The
grammar is error-free and the punctuation is used correctly.

Sample Answer 4:
The illustration depicts the process of sugar production from sugar canes. Overall, this 7-step
procedure spans a period of 12 to 18 months. It starts with the planting and harvesting of
sugar canes, followed by having them transported to the processing plant to end with the
making of sugar.

Initially, sugar canes are cultivated over 12 to 18 months until they reach maturity for
harvesting, which can be done with machinery or manual labor. When the materials are
prepared, they are transported to the manufacturing area for further steps involved.

At the processing plant, the sugar canes are crushed into juice by a machine, before
undergoing a purification stage where impurities such as limestone are removed. Once the
juice is ready, it is transformed into syrup by evaporating its water in a pot, followed by a
centrifuge in which sugar crystals are separated from the resulting substance. Finally, the
remaining fragrances can be dried and cooled to make sugar.

(159 words)

Overall Band Score


8.5
(+/- 0.5)
Vocabulary Complexity:
C1 - Intricate
Strive to incorporate even richer and more precise language.

Grammar Mistakes: 1
Vocabulary Repetition:
sugar: 7
canes: 4
Try using synonyms for the above words

Task Response
8.0
The report provides a good overview of the process, but could
be more detailed in its description of the steps involved. For
example, it could mention the specific types of machinery used
or the purpose of the limestone filter.
Coherence & Cohesion
8.0
The report is well-organized and easy to follow. The paragraphs
are well-structured and flow smoothly from one to the next.
Lexical Resource
8.0
The report uses a good range of vocabulary, but could be more
precise in its language. For example, instead of 'fragrances,' the
report could use 'impurities' or 'residues' to describe the
substances that are dried and cooled.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy
9.0
The report demonstrates a high level of grammatical accuracy
and fluency.
Sample Answer 5:
The provided illustration illustrates the sequential steps involved in the production of sugar
from sugar cane.

It is clear that the manufacturing process comprises seven key stages that span a 12- to 18-
month period, starting from the cultivation of sugar cane to the creation of the final sugar
product.

To begin with, sugar canes are cultivated over a 12-18-month period to achieve maturity for
harvesting. Subsequently, the mature sugar canes are harvested with specialized machinery
and undergo the juice extraction process through crushing. The extracted juice is then purified
using a limestone filter to eliminate impurities and subsequently converted into syrup through
evaporation.

Following this, the syrup undergoes centrifugation to separate the crystals from the liquid.
Finally, the separated crystals undergo drying and cooling processes, leading to the
production of the final sugar product. The entire manufacturing process involves meticulous
procedures to ensure the high-quality production of sugar from sugar cane.

(151 words)

Overall Band Score


9.0
(+/- 0.5)
Vocabulary Complexity:
C2 - Complex
Continue to challenge and refine your language choices.

Grammar Mistakes: 0
Vocabulary Repetition:
sugar: 9
production: 3
process: 3
Try using synonyms for the above words

Task Response
9.0
The report provides a thorough summary of the main features of
the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.
The comparisons are made where relevant, and the key stages
are clearly outlined within the 12-18 month growing period.
Coherence & Cohesion
9.0
The report is well-structured with clear paragraphing. The
information is logically organized, making it easy to follow the
sequence of the sugar making process. Cohesive devices are
effectively used to connect ideas and maintain the flow of the
report.
Lexical Resource
9.0
The report demonstrates a wide range of vocabulary related to
the sugar manufacturing process. The language used is precise
and accurate, enhancing the overall clarity of the report. There
is a sophisticated control of lexical features throughout.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy
9.0
A variety of grammatical structures are used effectively in the
report. The sentences are grammatically correct, and
punctuation is appropriately used. The overall range and
accuracy of grammar contribute to the coherence and clarity of
the report.
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