Essay editing – Writing 4 – VBA22_2
Write a problem-solution essay of at least 250 words to discuss the problem associated
with increasing car use in big cities and propose solutions to discourage people from
using their cars.
The demand for buying cars is continually increasing, as people not only require a
vehicle for transportation but also seek an "accessory" that can support them in their careers.
However, this growing demand means an increase in the presence of private vehicles in big
cities, leading to a corresponding rise in traffic jams. Is there any solution to alleviate this issue?
Fortunately, various options have been implemented in many countries to address this
problem. One solution that the Vietnamese government has successfully applied is limiting
the operating hours for cars on specific streets.
The decreasing cost of cars has made it easier for people to purchase them. In Hanoi,
the annual growth rate of cars is maintained at about 10%, with approximately 107,300 cars
entering urban areas each year. However, this surge in numbers does not align with the
existing infrastructure of Hanoi. Additionally, rush hour poses a nightmare for traffic
participants. A 4-seater car stopping for just 5 seconds on a congested route, such as Nguyen
Xien Street, is enough to cause a significant traffic backup.
Confronted with an increased number of cars and inadequate infrastructure, Hanoi has
implemented a rule to restrict the operating hours for cars. This system is indicated by signs
at the entrance of roads, allowing cars to enter the street only during specific hours. For
instance, there is a prohibition sign at the entrance of Vu Trong Phung Street from 7 pm to 9
pm, indicating that cars are not allowed to enter the road during that time. Drivers must choose
alternative routes. Consequently, the street becomes accessible only to other vehicles,
excluding cars, during this period. This rule aims to decrease the density of vehicles, thereby
reducing the strain on urban infrastructure.
In conclusion, limiting the running hours for cars on specific streets is an effective
measure to address the growing issue of traffic congestion in urban areas. As the number of
cars continues to rise, such strategies become crucial to maintaining a smooth flow of traffic
and ensuring the efficiency of existing infrastructure. It is important for cities to explore and
implement innovative solutions to strike a balance between the increasing demand for cars
and the limitations of urban infrastructure.
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Essay editing – Writing 4 – VBA22_2
Write a problem-solution essay of at least 250 words to discuss the
problem associated with increasing car use in big cities and propose
solutions to discourage people from using their cars.
Nowadays, using one's own mode of transportation is increasingly Commented [TP1]: The question mentions cars specifically.
You can't just say any random private vehicles, motorcycles
popular in modern civilizations. It causes global transportation congestion and bicycles included. Do bicycles cause environmental
pollution?
and pollution. However, using public transportation is one option for dealing
with this issue. Commented [TP2]: The introductory paragraph is supposed
to show the readers how you plan to answer the writing
question. So what issue? Congestion and pollution or the
First, excessive usage of private vehicles causes traffic congestion. increasing car use?
Be clear about this. The readers may think that you are going
Everyone has their own automobile, which causes a lot of traffic. For example, to write about solutions to congestion and pollution instead
of ways to discourage the car use. If that's the case, your
in major cities, traffic jams can last for more than an hour, and people essay is off-topic.
routinely beep their horns, exacerbating the problem. Ultimately, all of this Commented [TP3]: Are you sure that everyone has their
own car? Do you own one?
causes aggravation and tension for those who are unable to arrive at their Commented [TP4]: What problem? Traffic jams? Do people
beeping their horns have anything to do with traffic jams?
employment on time. Furthermore, noise and environmental pollution are
Commented [TP5]: Is it really an example?
growing. As a result, it is not uncommon for many of them to become ill Commented [TP6]: WC
quickly, particularly youngsters who are prone to illness. Furthermore, air Commented [TP7]: Does the increasing pollution have
anything to do with the increasing car use? Be specific.
pollution may have adverse impacts on people's health when they inhale
unfiltered exhaust gasses from cars.
Second, more motor vehicles equals more pollution. The toxic gases
emitted by the automobile pollute the air and cause a variety of health
concerns. For example, respiratory illnesses like asthma and bronchitis.
Furthermore, ozone layer depletion caused by pollution might lead to skin
disorders. Commented [TP8]: - You are repeating yourself.
- Using too many inappropriate transition signals may be
worse than using none at all.
The potential answer to these issues is to increase the usage of public - Do motor vehicles equal cars?
transportation. The government should educate the public on the benefits of Commented [TP9]: Again, which issues? Is this going off-
topic?
public transportation and emphasize the importance of legal control over
private transportation. Furthermore, the usage of public transit reduces the Commented [TP10]: Irrelevant. The writing question is not
about helping people save money.
expense that we spend on purchasing our own means of mobility. I think that Commented [TP11]: Is it the third body paragraph or the
if everyone cooperates and practices the methods outlined, our country's concluding paragraph?
Solutions to discourage people from using their cars is a
population will one day be free of the harmful consequences of this situation. large part of the question, thus deserving a fully developed
body paragraph.
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