Level 5 Writing Assignment Module 3

Persuasive Essay

Part 1 (First Draft of Essay, Dropbox): Monday, week 3

Part 2 (Final Essay, Dropbox): Thursday, week 3 (immediately after class - You may
want to bring your laptop that day.)

Part 1, First Draft (25%) Due: Monday, Week 3

Step 1) Choose one of the following topics for your Persuasive Essay. This should be
the same theme that you chose for your Reading Assignment.

1. Should Children Play Video Games?

2. Should Zoos and Marine Parks be Banned?
3. Should Everyone Travel Solo at Least Once?

Step 2) Complete the brainstorming chart with at least 10 ideas for your essay. (Using
a pen is fine, unless you prefer to type your brainstorm.)

Step 3) Complete the outline for the essay. (Using a pen is fine, unless you prefer to
type your outline.)

Step 4) Type the first draft of your essay, following the guidelines in the chart:

Title short, interesting, attention-grabbing

Introductory Paragraph  Includes a hook that grabs reader’s attention.
 Provides background about the topic.
 Thesis Statement clearly tells the reader what the
essay is about.
3 Body Paragraphs  2 paragraphs clearly present the main arguments with
facts, evidence and examples that support your thesis
statement.
 1 paragraph that presents a counterargument and
refutation to show you have considered opposing
opinions.
Concluding Paragraph  Restates the thesis statement.
 Summarizes all the arguments you have stated
 Offers a warning, prediction or suggestion about

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what should happen next

Connectors  Includes a variety of transition words and
connectors to enhance the flow of the writing.
Academic Vocabulary  At least 3-4 vocabulary words from Pathways, Unit
2, underlined.

Grammar Underline one example (put the number after each

example) of each type of Adjective Clause.
1. subject adjective clauses including who, which, that
2. object adjective clauses including who, which, that,
where, when
3. defining and non-defining adjective clauses (commas
and no commas)
4. which to modify a whole sentence
* be sure to use an adjective clause and not an adverb, i.e.,
Adjective Clause: A time when Jane was very happy was
last year because she got engaged.
Adverb Clause: When I saw the beach, I was happy.
Formatting  type your essay using 12 pt Arial or Times New
Roman font in 12pt
 indent first line using the ‘tab’ key
 double-space
 margins should be 1” (2.54 cm)
 essay should be left-justified
 include a header with your full name, English name
and student number, assignment and date

Step 5) Complete the “Self-Evaluation” (p. 4) and make any changes that you need to.

Step 6) Print your essay. Give your essay and a “Peer Evaluation” (p. 5 and 6) form to
two other students in the class. Ask each of them to read your essay, mark any
corrections with a different colour, and fully complete the evaluation form with specific
feedback to help you improve your essay.

Step 7) Read the evaluation forms, look at their corrections, and make any further
changes that you need to. Print your modified essay.

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Step 8) When you are satisfied with your first draft, submit the following:
a) Brainstorm, Outline, Self-Evaluation and 2 Peer-Evaluations.
b) the first essay you wrote with your classmates’ comments
c) your modified first draft

Part 2, Final Essay (20%) Due: Thursday, Week 3

Step 1) Read the feedback that your teacher has given you on your first draft and revise
your essay accordingly.

Step 2) Upload your final essay to Dropbox by Thursday, Week 3 immediately after
class.

Yingtian Li (Hunt)

300855905

Integrate core skill

5-3

Jacqui Steward

March 6th, 2017

Animals Should Kept In The Modern Zoo

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Persuasive Essay: Brainstorm

Topic:
For Against
Education Animals should be free
Protection Mentally harmful
Research Physically harmful
Income of tourism Natural environment losing
medical

Final Position:

Persuasive Essay Outline

Follow the format below. The number of supporting details and examples may be
different for your essay.

Thesis Statement (take a position): animals should kept in zoos

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A: Education
a) Children need to know the animals
I) remind them to protect animals

B: research
a) Scientists can do some research of animals
i) Find the way to make them leave the illness
b) Zookeeper can learn how to feed them
i) Zookeeper can get more knowledge to feed them scientism
ii) Help more animals back to the wild

C: Counterargument animals in zoos might not have great living environment

a) Refutation modern zoos built the enrich environments

i) Breeding center
ii) Researching center

Conclusion: (sentence) animals should allowed keep in zoos

“Zoo animals are ambassadors for their cousins in the wild.” Jack Hanna.

Most of people at least have been too the zoo once. When we went to the zoo,

somebody might think its merciless behavior for them, but incontestable fact zoos

were saving hundreds of endangered animals. More and more zoos develop

modernisation. In these zoos, it might hold more kinds of creature, who cannot live in

traditional zoos. In my opinion, animals live in modern zoos can promote education,

improve the scientific research and enhance environment.

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First of all, animals living in zoos can help education promotion. Actually, most

of people have been to the zoo at least once, when we went to the zoo, we saw

many creatures. Apparently, many children might have the first to see the live

animals, who are not only like the color on the book. Many children and adults, who

live in cities, will never have a chance to see wild [Link] must acknowledge,

education of children is our future, and we do not want their kids just can see these

animals on the picture. Children can gain a vast variety of knowledge of biology,

history and science. People went to zoos as a child, when they need us to induce a

right value of animal protection that might impact them a lot than we grow up.

Moreover, many zoos have technical zookeepers, who are great goal of these kids,

on the other word, we sowing the seeds of hope; they can finish the work, which we

need to enriched environment.

Secondly, animals living in zoos will improve scientific research. Nowadays,

hundreds of illnesses are tormenting animals. In wild filed, where do not allowed

doctors and scientist make the complex science experiments. We need to know

about how can we keep these important animals alive, act and react. Our scientist

were hard to study animals in the wild, so we need to kept them in zoos, where they

less risk and more safety. That is not an exaggeration to say that hundreds of

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species are going extinct all around the world, and much more are increasingly

threatened and nearly with extinction. If we can resolve the pollution of endangered

animals, like extinct in the wild’s South China tiger, it will be easier to let them back

to the nature. There are thousands project of endangered animals protection, but the

most important and effective one must be kept them in the zoo. Breeding projects

keeping endangered animals still alive in many place, and I believe, they will do back

to their own home-the wild.

However, I recognizing there were some zoos undesirable influence. Not all

animals are kept perfectly, otherwise, it is still be place we can improvement.

Somebody are against animals captivity in the little scope, but even that, I still think

there are some points can outweigh this against captivity. While, I would say, many

species kept in the zoo or Wildlife Park can have quality life than in the wild. They

might not have too much space of their movement, but they will not dead from the

predators, irritation and pain of parasites or injured and illness. Feeding animals in

the zoo can infinite improving them survival rate than in the wild. That can really

keep their population keep balance, without afraid of the sudden extensive illness of

extinction. In the past, zookeepers were trained by the general skills, but in the

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modern zoos, they have more specialist knowledge and often response with

particular animal.

In conclusion, we must believe that modern zoos can help more animals

leaving endangered and that we need to pay more attention about our environment.

Animals should back to the wild, where they belong with, and we should not hurt

them in any time or by any way. The earth is not only the home of human, which also

belong with all creatures, so let’s protect our friends-endangered animals. We still

have time, if we begin now.

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Level 5: First Draft Self-Evaluation

Organization ✓
Do you have an interesting, attention-grabbing introductory sentence?

Do you have a clear, parallel thesis statement?

Does the conclusion restate the thesis statement in different words?

Did you use a variety of transition words to enhance the flow of your essay?

Did you write approximately 600-800 words?

Content
Do you demonstrate that you have given considerable thought to the topic? (Did you use
information you gathered from the readings?)

Do you have enough strong evidence to effectively support the position in your thesis?

Grammar & Vocabulary

Do you use and underline an example of each type of Adjective Clause?

Do you correctly use subject-verb agreement?

Have you used academic vocabulary including and underlining 3-4 words from
Pathways Reading and Writing, Unit 2?

Mechanics & Style

Did you use a variety of simple, compound and complex sentences?

Did you use correct capitalization and punctuation?

Are your sentences free from comma splices, run-on errors and fragments?

Are your ideas clearly expressed and easy to understand?

Brainstorm, Outline, Self/Peer-Evaluations, Format

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Does your brainstorming chart contain at least 10 ideas?

Is your outline organized and thorough?

Have you included two completed peer-evaluations and a self-evaluation for your
essay?
Did you revise and include the 1st draft based on your classmates’ feedback?

Is your essay correctly formatted, i.e., title, indent, spacing, margins, font, left-
justification?

Did you include a header with your full name, student ID, assignment, and date?

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Level 5 Peer Evaluation #1 Name of evaluator:

Organization

Did your partner include a title, attention-grabbing

sentence, thesis statement and conclusion?

Did your partner use a variety of transition words?

Write at least 5 in the next column

How could your partner improve the organization of

their essay? Write at least 1 suggestion in the
next column.

Content

Did your partner include enough strong evidence

and support for the position taken in the thesis
statement?

Did your partner include an effective counter-

argument and refutation? Write each statement in
the next column.

Are there any parts of the essay that you need more
information about? Write 1-2 suggestions in the
next column about how your partner can
improve the content of the essay.

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Level 5 Peer Evaluation #2 Name of evaluator:

✓

Grammar & Punctuation

Did your partner correctly use and underline an

example of each type of Adjective Clause? What time
expressions did they use? Write 2 examples.

Did your partner correctly use S.V. agreement?

Did you partner correctly use and underline 3-4

Pathways words and academic vocabulary? Write
the Pathways vocabulary words that your
partner used in the next column.

Mechanics & Style

Did your partner use a variety of simple, compound

and complex sentences?

Did your partner use correct capitalization and

punctuation?

Are the sentences free from comma splices, run-on

errors and fragments?

Write any final comments in the next column.

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Level 5: First Draft Essay Rubric (25%): For Teachers Only

Legend: 5= Outstanding / 4= Exceeding Standards / 3= Meeting

Standards / 2= Progressing towards Standards / 1= Does not meet
Standards
Organization - The student:
 included an interesting, attention-grabbing introductory sentence. 5 4 3 2
 provided sufficient background information for the chosen topic. 1
 wrote a clear, parallel thesis statement that takes a position on the
topic.
 wrote approximately 600-800 words
 included an effective counter-argument and refutation
 concluded the essay by restating the thesis statement in different
words, summarized main points and offered a warning, prediction or
suggestion,
 used a variety of transition words to connect ideas and enhance the
flow of the essay
 clearly and logically presented ideas, support and evidence.
Content - The student:
 demonstrated that he or she has given considerable thought to the 5 4 3 2
topic. 1
 effectively used information gathered from related readings.
 provided enough strong evidence to support position.
 included ideas that demonstrate complexity and depth of thought
Grammar & Vocabulary - The student:
 used a variety of subject and object adjective clauses, underlined and 5 4 3 2
numbered 1 example of each. 1
 correctly used subject-verb agreement.
 included academic vocabulary and underlined 3 – 4 words from
Pathways, Unit 2.
Mechanics & Style - The student:
 used a variety of simple, compound and complex sentences. 5 4 3 2
 correctly used capitalization and punctuation. 1
 avoided comma splices, run-on errors and fragments in sentences
Brainstorm, Outline, Self/Peer-Evaluations, Format - The student:
 included at least 10 ideas in brainstorming chart 5 4 3 2
 provided an outline that is organized and thorough. 1
 included 2 completed peer-evaluations and a self-evaluation for
essay.
 1st draft is included and modified according to peer-feedback.
 correctly formatted the essay, i.e., title, indent, double-space, margins,
font, left-justification
Total: /2
5

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Level 5 Final Essay Rubric (20%) * For Teachers Only

Assessment Area
Legend: 5= Outstanding / 4= Exceeding Standards / 3= Meeting Standards / 2=
Progressing towards Standards / 1= Does not meet Standards
Organization: The essay has an interesting, attention-grabbing introductory
sentence and background information. The essay includes a parallel thesis 5 4 3 2
statement that clearly states a position. The concluding statement restates 1
the main idea without repeating it. The main points are clearly summarized
and a prediction, suggestion or warning is offered. Transition words are used
correctly and enhance the flow of the essay.
Content: The essay provides strong evidence and support for the position
taken. The details are clear, well-organized, show depth of thought, and 5 4 3 2
elaborate on the main topic of the essay. A counterargument is given and 1
effectively refuted.
Grammar/Vocabulary: Grammar is used at an appropriate level. Grammar
points taught in class are underlined, numbered, and used correctly. Variety 5 4 3 2
of academic vocabulary including from Pathways is used and underlined. 1
Appropriate word-choice
Mechanics/ Formatting: A variety of compound and complex sentences are
used. Free of Run-on Sentences, Comma Splices and Fragments. Correct use 5 4 3 2
of punctuation and capitalization. Correct essay format (header, margins, 1
font, spacing, justification) is used. Attention-grabbing title.
Total /2
0

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