Extended essay: Example commentary
Subject Chemistry WSEE theme (if
applicable):
Category for Subjects used for WSEE
language essays (if applicable):
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Title of essay: An investigation into the synthesis of Aspirin in accordance with
the principles of green chemistry
Research To what extent can the industrial method of synthesis of aspirin
question: be altered to best comply with the principles of green
chemistry?
Assessment details
Criterion Mark Commentary
awarded
A: Focus and 3 The topic is communicated but the explanation of
method it is not entirely clear. The research question is too
[Maximum possible broad, redesigning an industrial process through
mark: 6] all green chemistry principles seems too big to
tackle. Some focus is needed (to what extent?).
Methodology is mostly complete, although the
industrial method is not fully explained. A lab
method is used. There is not much evidence of
informed selection of sources.
B: Knowledge and 3 Knowledge and understanding are good; the
understanding selection of sources is relevant although limited.
[Maximum possible There is a misconception about melting point of a
mark: 6] mixture. No mechanisms for esterification are
shown. Some mistakes are made in the naming of
compounds and use of units.
C: Critical thinking 6 Most of the research is appropriate, with some
[Maximum possible parts of green chemistry left aside. The analysis is
mark: 12] relevant although limited. The conclusion is
partially supported by evidence. An argument is
developed, though weak, with almost no critical
evaluation.
D: Presentation 3 The layout is good, the structure is within
[Maximum possible expectations, illustrations are in place. The
mark: 4] research question is not included on the title
page.
E: Engagement 4 Reflection on process is present, but not with a
[Maximum possible critical approach. Decisions are not evaluated,
mark: 6] just mentioned. Some interest in organic
chemistry is mentioned, as well as environmental
concerns.
Total marks 19/34
awarded