Name : Syafiq Khairi
NIM : 0304202139
Class : TBI 5/3th Semester
My vacation In My house
On vacation, I like spending time at home with my family. We often sit on the cream-
coloured living room sofa to watch TV. To the left of the tv is a large wardrobe. The wardrobe
contains my family unity clothes. To the left of the tv room, there is a swimming pool which is
not too big, and the water is blue. There was a white swing and green grass that made me feel
comfortable there.
Behind the TV room, there is a dining room consisting of a dining table and a chandelier
above. At dinner, we always eat our food at the table. To the right of the dining table, there is a
beautiful kitchen where my mother cooks, lots of cooking utensils there. Since my mother often
baked cookies, she placed the oven beside the stove. To the left of the dining table is a bathroom
that is not too big, too small.
Not only in the TV room, we often spend time on the terrace of our house, but there is
also a green swing, four white chairs and a bonsai on the table. We have a large yard and a small
garage. Our yard is full of roses and greenery my mother planted. Not to forget the mango tree in
the left corner of the fence is my sister and I favourite place to climb trees. The black wall of the
rail is also decorated with colourful plants by my mother.
I am grateful to be able to vacation in my house. It is comfortable and not too big, and
because I can be with my family, and can also joke around in the corner of our simple and
beautiful house.
Feedback from Devi Sunita Mutia Asmara (0304202131)
I think it’s a good descriptive essay because the essay describe even if the holidays at home stay
grateful and i can see writer’s activities in it. But there are still some mistake in the spelling and
punctuation. I hope the writer can revise back this essay to make it even better.
Revision
On vacation, I like spending time at home with my family. We often sit on the cream-coloured
living room sofa to watch TV. To the left of the tv is a large wardrobe. The wardrobe contains
my family unity clothes. To the left of the tv room, there is a swimming pool which is not too
big, and the water is blue. There was a white swing and green grass that made me feel
comfortable there.
Behind the TV room, there is a dining room consisting of a dining table and a chandelier above.
At dinner, we always eat our food at the table. To the right of the dining table, there is a beautiful
kitchen where my mother cooks, lots of cooking utensils there. Since my mother often baked
cookies, she placed the oven beside the stove. To the left of the dining table is a bathroom that is
not too big, too small.
Not only in the TV room, we often spend time on the terrace of our house, but there is also a
green swing, four white chairs, and a bonsai on the table. We have a large yard and a small
garage. Our yard is full of roses and greenery my mother planted. Not to forget the mango tree in
the left corner of the fence is my sister and I favourite place to climb trees. The black wall of the
rail is also decorated with colourful plants by my mother.
I am grateful to be able to vacation in my house. It is comfortable and not too big, and because I
can be with my family, and can also joke around in the corner of our simple and beautiful house.
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