IELTS Task 1 Writing Correction
You took your family to a nearby restaurant. You were disappointed with
the meal and wish to complain to the manager. Write a letter to the Candidate:
manager of the restaurant. In your letter Davoud Barzegar
• Explain why you were at the restaurant Correction:
• Describe the problems [Link]
• Write about the action you want the manager to take
Dear sir/madam,
I am just writing to express my dissatisfaction with the food quality which I and my family served in Commented [M1]: GRA: word order
your restaurant on last Thursday night. Commented [M2]: GRA: voice
For clarifying, I would explain that last weekend we celebrated my father's birthday party in your Commented [M3]: GRA: Preposition
restaurant, since some of my friends had recommended your restaurant, plus, it was located in our Commented [M4]: LR: not a good transition
neighborhood, therefore we had easy access to it.
Commented [M5]: GRA: Preposition
Although the staff were friendly, polite and well-trained, but the food itself was a real disaster and Commented [M6]: CC: Cohesive Device
became the source and reason of our complaint. Firstly, the food was served cold, moreover, all Commented [M7]: CC: Cohesive Device
vegetables and meat were not well cooked and even they were not medium. Two hours later, when we
Commented [M8]: GRA: wrong structure
returned home, my father got sick. When took him to hospital and after examination, the doctor told us
that our father had been poisoned by food. Whereas, we were going to make a memorable night for our Commented [M9]: GRA: wrong preposition
father but your restaurant made us an unpleasant. Commented [M10]: GRA: Structure
Commented [M11]: GRA: Punctuation
You are requested to have a better supervision on restaurant's food quality, considering the fact that
other customers can be suffered by the foods which you serve there. In addition to, I expect you to Commented [M12]: GRA: Article
refund the money that I paid for the dinner that night or compensate this by inviting my family to your Commented [M13]: GRA: Preposition
restaurant for free. Commented [M14]: GRA: article
I await your prompt assistance and response in this regard. Commented [M15]: GRA: Preposition
Commented [M16]: GRA: Preposition
Yours faithfully,
Commented [M17]: GRA: preposition
Davoud Barzegar
Commented [M18]: GRA: Preposition
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Task 1 General :نوع رایتینگ
Task
Response 237 :تعداد واژها
13 :تعداد جمالت
Grammar Coherence
Range and and
Accuracy Cohesion
TR CC LR GR :نمرات معیارهای رایتینگ
7 7 7 6
Tlexical
Resource
6.5 :نمره تخمینی
Passive Voice Index Prepositional Phrase Index Clarity Index
127 80 10.5
0 50 100 150 200 0 50 100 150 200 0 5 10 15 20
Vocabulary Variety Adverbs Adjectives
3% 0%
40%
60%
97% 100%
Unique Words Repeated Words Adverbs Other words Adjectives Other words
143 (60.34% of total words) 143 (60.34% of total words) 1 (0.42% of total words)
Refrencing Less Common Words Function Words
14% 6%
44%
56%
86%
94%
Refrencing Other words Less Common Words Other words Function Words Other words
33 (13.92%) 15 (6.33% of total words) 140 (42.68% of total words)
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13 :تعداد کل جمالت
18.23 :میانگین تعداد حروف جمالت
8 :تعداد پارگراف ها
1.63 :میانگین تعداد جمالت هر پاراگراف
Sentence Types Long Sentences
8% 8%
46%
46%
92%
Simple Complex Compund-Complex Long Normal
General Tips based on Task 2 Band Scripter (Public Version)
Task Response
Covers all the requirements
Presents a clear purpose with paying attention to the bullet points
Coherence and Cohesion
Logically organizes the information
Uses cohesive devices effectively
Lexical Resource
uses an adequate range of vocabulary
Some words need to be more precise
Grammar Range and Accuracy
uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms
makes some errors in grammar and punctuation but they rarely reduce communication
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Revised Response :نسخه بهبود یافته متن
میبلشد تاGR وLR توجه داشته باشید که این تغییرات تنها بر اساس متن نوشته شما صورت گرفته است و بیشتر تمرکز بر روی معیارهای
نگارش آن توسط، که برای اگزمینرها بسیار قابل توجه است، جنرال1 از آنجایی که یکی از موارد مهم در نگارش متن تسک.CC وTA معیارهای
از این رو تالش شده است که تغییراتی در دیدگاههای شما صورت نگیرد و تغییرات اعمال شده،خود شرکت کننده (نه حفظ شده) میباشد
.براساس متن نگاشته شده شما است؛ نه دیدگاههای ممتحن
You took your family to a nearby restaurant. You were disappointed with the meal and wish to
complain to the manager. Write a letter to the manager of the restaurant. In your letter
• Explain why you were at the restaurant
• Describe the problems
• Write about the action you want the manager to take
Dear sir/madam,
I am just writing to express my dissatisfaction with the food quality which my family and I were served
in your restaurant last Thursday night.
It would be clarifying to explain that we made a decision to celebrate my father's birthday party in
your restaurant because some of my friends had recommended your restaurant. Moreover, due to the
fact that your restaurant was located in our neighborhood, we had an easy access to it.
We were going to make a memorable night for our father, but your restaurant made unpleasant
memory for all of us. Although the staff were friendly, polite and well-trained, the food, which is the
main source and reason for our complaint, was a real disaster. Firstly, the food served was cold, all
vegetables and meat were not well cooked and were not medium, at all. Unbelievably, two hours later,
my father got sick when we returned home. After taking him to the hospital, the doctor, after examining
him, told us that our father had been poisoned by food.
You are requested to have better supervision on restaurant's food quality, considering the fact that
other customers can be suffered by the foods which you serve there. In addition, I expect you to refund
the money that I paid for the dinner that night or compensate for this by inviting my family to your
restaurant for free and serve them with a high quality food.
I await your prompt assistance and response in this regard.
Yours faithfully,
Davoud Barzegar
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Suggested Response :متن پیشنهادی
You took your family to a nearby restaurant. You were disappointed with the meal and wish to
complain to the manager. Write a letter to the manager of the restaurant. In your letter
• Explain why you were at the restaurant
• Describe the problems
• Write about the action you want the manager to take
Sample 1
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am a regular diner at your restaurant on the Valiasr Avenue. I am writing to express my discontent with
the meal that my family and I had at your restaurant last Thursday. I am hoping that you would take
actions to improve your food quality and maintain your reputation.
Recently, I have been promoted to the Senior Internal Auditor in my office and to celebrate this event, I
took my family out to one of your outlets on Valiasr Avenue. We ordered four servings of shrimp fried
rice, but we were shocked to discover that the shrimp in our serving was undercooked and had a
pungent odour. After complaining about it to the supervisor, we were told that the restaurant had run
out of shrimps - not a valid excuse for a distinguished restaurant like yours. You can understand my
frustration when my family and I had to leave the restaurant empty stomach and disappointment.
My intention in writing this letter is to ask you to issue a show cause notice to the supervisor at your
restaurant, and disseminate instructions to all your staff to hold a modicum of buffer stock for every
item, just in case the restaurant runs out of that item and so that no customer experiences a
humiliation.
Yours faithfully,
Afrooz Hoshivar
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Sample 2
Dear Sir or Madam,
I visited your restaurant on 11th May with my family to celebrate my sister’s birthday. We usually enjoy
your food but this time it was disappointing. I am hoping that you would keep your food quality intact
and take action regarding the bad dining experience we have had.
We have always considered your restaurant as the most classy French cuisine place in town. Since my
sister lives in France, we dine at your restaurant every time she is in our country. This time it was even
more special as we were celebrating her birthday. But the whole event was ruined due to the dishes we
were served.
I suppose you can imagine our disappointment when we found the onion soup absolutely inedible. It
was cold, and it appeared your chef did not stir it well while cooking. Some clogs of flour were visible in
the soup. Moreover, the main course was cold and not up to our expectation. They tasted very ordinary
and hackneyed but we paid almost thrice for these items! We asked a waitress about the reasons and
she had no plausible excuse for that.
I am looking forward to hearing that you have taken the necessary steps to maintain your reputation
and food quality. Otherwise, you have already lost a customer.
Yours faithfully,
Davoud Barzegar
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