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Single Fathers: Raising Children Successfully

This document is a revision summary for an essay arguing that a single father can raise children. The author added more details and evidence to support the argument. A hook and clear thesis were included. Each body paragraph now has a topic sentence and the paragraphs were checked to avoid repetition. The conclusion restates the thesis and summarizes the body paragraphs.

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Single Fathers: Raising Children Successfully

This document is a revision summary for an essay arguing that a single father can raise children. The author added more details and evidence to support the argument. A hook and clear thesis were included. Each body paragraph now has a topic sentence and the paragraphs were checked to avoid repetition. The conclusion restates the thesis and summarizes the body paragraphs.

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Mustakim Choudhury

2nd Hour
6/5/19
Fit Enough To Raise The Child
Revisions

In this essay, I added more detail and evidence to support my argument that a single

father can raise children. I added a hook and transition for the beginning of my essay. I also

made my thesis more clear. I made sure to clearly separate my two supporting details and state

how they each support my argument. For each body paragraph, I also added a topic sentence

which outlines my paragraph. I also looked through my essay and made sure that I didn’t say the

same things over and over. For the conclusion paragraph, I restated that thesis and gave a short

summary of my body paragraphs.

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