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Revised Argument on Reparations Benefits

The document discusses revisions made to an argument essay on the benefits of reparations. The author divided each supporting detail more clearly, deleted repeated sentences, simplified passages that were too spread out, and made sentences less wordy. While the first paragraph required few changes, unnecessary details in some areas were removed. The concluding sentence was also changed to leave the reader with a memorable final thought.

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Revised Argument on Reparations Benefits

The document discusses revisions made to an argument essay on the benefits of reparations. The author divided each supporting detail more clearly, deleted repeated sentences, simplified passages that were too spread out, and made sentences less wordy. While the first paragraph required few changes, unnecessary details in some areas were removed. The concluding sentence was also changed to leave the reader with a memorable final thought.

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Mustakim Choudhury

2nd Hour
06/01/19

Argument #2 Benefits of Reparations


Revisions
I made revisions to this argument essay by mostly making things clear and by actually

dividing each supporting detail more clearly. I also deleted sentences I might have repeated a

couple of times. I simplified things that were too spread out. I made sentences less wordy as

well. But in the first paragraph I felt really confident so I didn’t make many changes. I realized

that I went too detailed in some areas so I removed any unnecessary parts. Also, I removed the

part when I talked about specific family issues because it didn’t pertain to my argument. I

changed the last sentence of my essay, so it could be something the reader remembers my essay

by.

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