WRITING TASK 1

The provided chart illustrates the information about three types of the waste
disposal in a European country in 4 years, from 2005 to 2008.
Overall, while landfill recorded a significant decrease between 2005 and 2008,
burning waste rose by nearly one-third of the initial figure. Notably, there was a
constant fluctuation every year in the amount of dumping at sea.
Regarding landfill sites, in 2005, it dominated at 1800 million tonnes compared to
other categories. However, over the period, the amount of waste gradually
plummeted to half of the original figure in 2008.
Turning to burning refuse, there was a dramatic rise of approximately 400 million
tonnes in the period between 2005 and 2008. It increased by 100 million tonnes
every year and finally reached the peak of 1100 million tonnes, which was much
higher than other types.
In terms of dumping at sea, from 2005 to 2006, it experienced a slight growth and
then remained at 600 million tonnes in 2007. Ultimately, between 2007 and 2008,
the amount of dumping dropped marginally by around 50 million tonnes
ĐIỂM MẠNH

● Có overview rõ ràng.

● Nhận diện được xu hướng chính:

o Landfill giảm mạnh.

o Burning tăng đều.
o Sea dumping dao động nhẹ.

● Bố cục hợp lý.

● Chia đoạn theo từng phương pháp xử lý rác.

● Trình tự thời gian rõ ràng.

● Có nhiều từ vựng học thuật:

o significant decrease
 o dramatic rise
o marginally
o dominated
o fluctuation

● Có sử dụng nhiều cấu trúc khác nhau.

● Một số câu khá tự nhiên.

ĐIỂM YẾU

● Có lỗi số liệu nghiêm trọng.

● Burning năm 2008 là khoảng 900 triệu tấn chứ không phải 1100 triệu tấn.

● Overview chưa thật chính xác vì sea dumping chủ yếu ổn định, không phải
"constant fluctuation every year".

● Một số câu diễn đạt thiếu tự nhiên.

● Có hiện tượng dùng từ nối nhưng logic chưa thật chặt.

● Nhiều collocation chưa chuẩn.

● Một số từ dùng đúng nghĩa nhưng không đúng văn phong Task 1.

● Có lỗi:

o article
o noun phrase
o collocation
o lựa chọn động từ

CÁCH CẢI THIỆN

● Kiểm tra số liệu kỹ hơn.

 ● Tránh dùng từ mạnh như:

o plummeted
o dramatic rise
khi số liệu không đủ lớn.

● Tập trung học collocation chuyên Task 1.

LỖI TỪ VỰNG, NGỮ PHÁP, COLLOCATION, CÁCH DIỄN ĐẠT (họt họt họt)
illustrates the information about three types of the waste disposal

illustrates the amount of waste disposed of using three different methods

illustrates three waste disposal methods

in a European country in 4 years in a European country over a four-year period

burning waste rose by nearly one-third of the initial figure the amount of waste burned increased

there was a constant fluctuation every year

there were only minor fluctuations throughout the period

the figure remained relatively stable

landfill sites

landfill disposal

waste sent to landfill

(landfill sites = địa điểm chôn lấp)

it dominated at 1800 million tonnes

it stood at 1,800 million tonnes

it accounted for 1,800 million tonnes

the amount of waste gradually plummeted

the amount of waste declined steadily

the figure fell gradually

("plummet" = giảm cực mạnh trong thời gian ngắn)

Turning to burning refuse

Turning to waste incineration

Regarding burning waste

(refuse dùng được nhưng khá gượng)

dramatic rise of approximately 400 million tonnes

a steady increase of approximately 400 million tonnes

reached the peak of 1100 million tonnes

reached a peak of 900 million tonnes

(Sai số liệu)

much higher than other types

making it the second most common disposal method

the amount of dumping

the amount of waste dumped at sea

experienced a slight growth

increased slightly

saw a slight increase

ultimately, between 2007 and 2008

by the end of the period (natural hn)

dumping at sea (lặp nhiều)

sea disposal

WRITING TASK 2:
In this day and age, there are still older generations who have traditional
perspectives about the way people live, think and behave. Otherwise, many people
regard it as an old-fashioned thought in modern society. In my view, I partly agree
with this opinion.
On the one hand, senior people believe in their deep-seated beliefs because those
were stemmed from a long cultivated process. It helps them avoid common
mistakes in daily life, like job choices, marriage and education. For example, a lot
of them claim that it is better to opt for 9-to-5 jobs to seek stable employment
rather than other freelance occupations. In the economic instability, creativity
pursuit often underrated and had a volatile income stream, which leads to being at
a disadvantage in the job market. Therefore, their thoughts may be beneficial for
people due to practical experiences and hands-on results.
On the other hand, deep-seated beliefs are ill-suited to contemporary
developments, when many things change including the way individuals think, do
and pursue. Nowadays, they prioritize individualism and flexibility over safety but
boredom. For example, young generations embrace calculated risky experiences in
the pursuit of novelty. In big firms, employers also encourage their employees’
creativity and cultivate innovation. As a result, traditional perspectives are not only
the constraints of obsolete conventions, but also hinder societal growth.
In conclusion, I believe that although traditional values always hold an important
place in day -to-day life, innovation and creativity is more prioritized in the new
eras. It also means that old thoughts are no longer suitable for modern development
where prefer value hands-on experiences over formal protocols.
ĐIỂM MẠNH

● Có quan điểm rõ ràng (partly agree).

● Thảo luận được cả lợi ích và hạn chế của tư tưởng truyền thống.

● Có ví dụ minh họa tương đối phù hợp.

● Cấu trúc bài rõ:

o Introduction
o Body 1
o Body 2
o Conclusion

● Các luận điểm triển khai khá logic.

● Có nhiều từ vựng tương đối tốt:

o deep-seated beliefs
 o economic instability
o volatile income stream
o innovation
o societal growth

● Có nhiều câu phức.

● Có cố gắng sử dụng cấu trúc học thuật.

ĐIỂM YẾU

● Một số ví dụ chưa thực sự thuyết phục.

● Ý tưởng "freelance occupations" phát triển hơi đơn giản.

● Một vài đoạn chuyển ý hơi đột ngột.

● Có nhiều collocation chưa tự nhiên.

● Một số cụm mang dấu hiệu dịch từ tiếng Việt.

● Vẫn còn khá nhiều lỗi:

o verb form
o article
o preposition
o word choice

CÁCH CẢI THIỆN

Để lên Band 6.5–7.0:

● Dùng ví dụ cụ thể hơn.

● Tránh các collocation không tự nhiên.

 ● Học thêm:

o social norms
o cultural heritage
o personal autonomy
o moral principles
o critical thinking

LỖI TỪ VỰNG, NGỮ PHÁP, COLLOCATION, CÁCH DIỄN ĐẠT

otherwise, many people regard it as an old-fashioned thought

however, many people regard such views as outdated

nevertheless, many people consider these beliefs old-fashioned

("otherwise" dùng sai)

senior people believe in their deep-seated beliefs

older generations hold deeply rooted beliefs (lp belief)

those were stemmed from a long cultivated process

these beliefs have been shaped over generations

these values have developed through centuries of experience

avoid common mistakes in daily life, like job choices, marriage and education

avoid common mistakes related to careers, marriage and education

opt for 9-to-5 jobs

pursue conventional full-time employment (Band 7 wording)

other freelance occupations

freelance careers

self-employed work

In the economic instability

During periods of economic instability

In times of economic uncertainty

creativity pursuit often underrated creative pursuits are often underestimated

had a volatile income stream tend to provide less stable income

which leads to being at a disadvantage

which may place individuals at a disadvantage

due to practical experiences and hands-on results

due to their practical experience and proven outcomes

deep-seated beliefs are ill-suited to contemporary developments

some traditional beliefs are no longer suited to contemporary society

when many things change including the way individuals think, do and pursue

as the way people think, work and pursue opportunities has changed significantly
prioritize individualism and flexibility over safety but boredom

prioritize flexibility and personal fulfilment over stability and routine

("safety but boredom" rất không tự nhiên)

embrace calculated risky experiences embrace calculated risks (collocation chun)

cultivate innovation encourage innovation

traditional perspectives are not only the constraints of obsolete conventions

traditional perspectives can become constraints imposed by outdated conventions

hinder societal growth

hinder social progress

restrict societal development

innovation and creativity is more prioritized

innovation and creativity are increasingly prioritized

in the new eras

in the modern era

in today's society
old thoughts are no longer suitable

traditional beliefs are no longer entirely suitable

modern development where prefer value hands-on experiences

modern societies that place greater value on practical experience

formal protocols

traditional conventions

rigid social norms

deep-seated beliefs (lặp nhiều lần)

traditional values

traditional perspectives (lặp)

traditional viewpoints