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The document outlines revisions and recommendations for a thesis on risk exposure and management practices of start-ups in Baguio City, focusing on their relationship with financial performance. Key changes include clarifications in data gathering procedures, synthesis of findings, and adjustments to theoretical discussions. Additionally, the conclusion and recommendations sections were revised to better reflect the study's implications and ensure proper APA formatting for references.
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The document outlines revisions and recommendations for a thesis on risk exposure and management practices of start-ups in Baguio City, focusing on their relationship with financial performance. Key changes include clarifications in data gathering procedures, synthesis of findings, and adjustments to theoretical discussions. Additionally, the conclusion and recommendations sections were revised to better reflect the study's implications and ensure proper APA formatting for references.
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Risk Exposure and Risk Management Practices of Start-ups in Baguio City: Their Relationship

with Financial Performance


1st Revision
PANELIST ITEM/SECTION RECOMMENDATIONS/ ACTION TAKEN PAGE
PARTICULARS COMMENTS

Datsun C. Approval Sheet Change the “research Approval Sheet now Page 2
Montes proposal” to “thesis reads “this thesis
entitled” entitled”

Lorenzo Chapter 2: Include interview in the procedure now states Page 52


Dominic M. Data Gathering data gathering procedure the approach was
Salazar & Procedure quantitative,
Datsun C. supplemented by brief
Montes follow-up interviews,
and explains their
purpose.

Lorenzo Chapter 2: Include who answered the now specifies the Page 53
Dominic M. Data Gathering questionnaires respondent was the
Salazar Procedure founders,
co-founders, owner,
or CEO

Datsun C. Chapter 3: Include implications and A 47,50,60,


Montes All tables insights in the practical-implication 62,64,67,
explanation of the paragraph now follows 71,74,77,
results-not just table every table 79,82,84,
reading discussion throughout
the chapter. 88,91,94,
97,101,
103,106
PANELIST ITEM/SECTION RECOMMENDATIONS/COMMENTS ACTION TAKEN PAGE
PARTICULARS

Datsun C. Chapter 3: All Instead of repeating the A dedicated Synthesis 67,71


Montes findings and same explanation across section was added 73,74
results all tables, synthesize the after the SOP 4–6 78,79
discussion correlation tables. 82,84
88,91
94,97
101,103
106

Datsun C. Chapter 3: Table What is resource-depletion The term is now Page


Montes 13 findings defined (citing OECD, 84
2021) and explicitly
flagged as an
interpretation, not a
directly measured
variable.

Datsun C. Chapter 3: Table Overstatement “central phrase removed; Page


Montes 19 empirical findings of this discussion now uses 103
chapter”; restate appropriately hedged
language.

Datsun C. Chapter 3: Avoid Causation language; causal phrasing Applied


Montes Correlation you are only testing the revised to to
relationship correlational language whole
with explicit Chapter
non-causal disclaimers 3
throughout.

PANELIST ITEM/SECTION RECOMMENDATIONS/ ACTION TAKEN PAGE


PARTICULARS COMMENTS

Lorenzo Dominic Chapter 3: Remove the comparison removed; Life Applied


M. Salazar & Discussion statistical Cycle Theory retained only to
Datsun C. Montes comparison for as background literature, whole
the life cycle not as a tested variable. Chapter
stage-not part 3
of the study

Datsun C. Montes Chapter 3: Exclude Prospect The opening paragraph's Page


Theory in the “three theoretical 66
discussion since anchors” sentence no
its dimensions longer names Prospect
were never Theory; only ERM Theory
mentioned and Life Cycle Theory
remain. Combined with the
earlier removal of all
Prospect Theory paragraphs
and
interview-reinforcement
sentences, the theory is
now fully excluded from
the Chapter 3 discussion

Gregorio F. Chapter 3: Include possible Table 14 discussion names Page


Roxas shortcomings in inconsistent/irregular 88
risk management application as the primary
in the findings shortcoming.

PANELIST ITEM/SECTION RECOMMENDATIONS/COMMENTS ACTION TAKEN PAGE


PARTICULARS

Lorenzo Dominic Chapter 3: Results of SOP 4-6 Each SOP 4–6 result Page
M. Salazar should be properly now has a 106
discussed with practical-implicati 108
implications/insights on paragraph before 110
not just corroborated the literature 118
with the literature and citation. 121
theories 124

Lorenzo Dominic Chapter 3: Towards the end of added a closing Page


M. Salazar Chapter 3, include a synthesis paragraph 129
synthesis of the major tying together SOP
findings for all SOPs 1–3 (descriptive
findings) and SOP
4–6 (correlational
findings), placed
at the end of the
existing Synthesis
section.

Datsun C. Montes Chapter 4: Basis of “unpredictable Revised the Page


Conclusion shifts in consumer conclusion to 130
spending and a cultural identify the
preference for specific market
established brands” and risk indicators
if it is measured supporting the
result—unpredictabl
e consumer spending
power and slow
customer adoption
associated with a
perceived
preference for
established
brands—and
clarified their
implication as
demand uncertainty
and difficulty
gaining market
acceptance.
PANELIST ITEM/SECTION RECOMMENDATIONS/ ACTION TAKEN PAGE
PARTICULARS COMMENTS

Datsun C. Montes Chapter 4: What is Replaced the Page


Conclusion resource-depletion? Was unmeasured causal 131
this measured? explanation of
“resource depletion”
with a more cautious
interpretation focused
on the observed
negative relationship
between risk exposure
and the consistency of
risk management
implementation,
consistent with the
correlational design
of the study.

Gregorio F. Chapter 4: Include in the Recommendation #2 now Page


Roxas recommendations the explicitly states that 132
trainings provided by DTI may support this
DTI to address area through practical
shortcomings in risk entrepreneurship
management training focused on
risk assessment,
contingency planning,
and financial
monitoring.
Lorenzo Dominic Chapter 4: Recommendations should Recommendations are Page
M. Salazar be based on areas explicitly presented 132-134
needing improvement per in the same order as,
results-specific, and directly grounded
addressing major in, the conclusions
findings, one-to-one above.
correspondence

Datsun C. Montes References Use APA format; Applied APA formatting Page
indicate the data to all references. And 135
retrieved for all individually verified
references taken from every link to ensure
the internet and ensure it is working.
that all links actually
works

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