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The document discusses the implications of pet ownership, emphasizing the need for careful consideration before adopting a pet due to the responsibilities involved. It highlights the issues of animal abuse and stresses that pets require time, care, and affection as sentient beings. The evaluation of the writing activity indicates a Band 4.5 score, noting strengths in task achievement and coherence, while suggesting improvements in vocabulary and grammar.

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Writing Activity

The document discusses the implications of pet ownership, emphasizing the need for careful consideration before adopting a pet due to the responsibilities involved. It highlights the issues of animal abuse and stresses that pets require time, care, and affection as sentient beings. The evaluation of the writing activity indicates a Band 4.5 score, noting strengths in task achievement and coherence, while suggesting improvements in vocabulary and grammar.

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Writing activity

Have you ever thought about the implications of taking care of a pet at home? In recent
years, that has become a great way to get company, because everyone needs to know
what it means to love a pet, because that can lead to feeling happier. But it is also really
important to analyze all the implications of adopting a pet, because it is not an easy task.

The first thing to analyze is the reasons for that problem, because now people want to
have a pet or maybe they want to give pets as gifts to kids, like their children, but they
need to think about it, because having a pet is not an easy activity. When you have a pet,
you need to take care of it, you need to teach it to go to the bathroom in the park, not in
the house.

The second thing to analyze is the consequences of that problem, because these days it is
very common for people to hurt animals, because they are not good people and
maybe they try to hurt them to feel better or more rebellious. But this is a big problem
because animal abuse has become more common these days, and we need to prevent it.

I think the most effective solution is that people analyze if they can invest time in a pet,
because having a pet is not only about having a friend or a toy. Because pets
are sentient beings, they have feelings, and they need care and affection. So I think before
you decide to buy or give pets as gifts, you need to know if you or they are responsible
enough.

Grade: Band 4.5

1. Task Achievement (5): The essay answers the topic and presents causes,
consequences, and a solution in a clear way.
2. Coherence and Cohesion (4): The ideas are organized into paragraphs, and some
basic linking words are used.
3. Lexical Resource (4): The vocabulary is appropriate for the topic of pets and
responsibility.
4. Grammatical Range and Accuracy (4): Although there are some grammatical
mistakes, the message is clear and easy to understand.
5. Areas for improvement: Use a wider range of vocabulary and review some
grammatical structures to improve accuracy.

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