IELTS Writing Task 1 – KHÔI
Task 1 – Bar chart (Divorce rates)
1. Bài gốc (đã đánh dấu lỗi)
The chart shows the divorce rate in two European countries from 2011 to 2015. From this
chart we can see (Overall,) the amount of divorce case is higher in Sweden.(divorce rates
were generally higher in Sweden.)
2. Band Scores
TA CC LR GRA Overall
5.0 5.0 5.5 5.0 5.0
3. Nhận xét
Overview chưa rõ ràng và cách diễn đạt chưa phù hợp với văn phong học thuật. Cụm 'From
this chart we can see' thường không dùng trong IELTS Writing Task 1. Ngoài ra cụm
'amount of divorce case' cũng không chính xác về mặt ngữ pháp.
4. Phiên bản nâng band
The bar chart compares divorce rates in Sweden and Finland between 2011 and 2015.
Overall, Sweden recorded higher divorce rates for most of the period, whereas Finland
showed a gradual increase and eventually caught up with Sweden.
Task 2 – Olympic medals
1. Bài gốc (đã đánh dấu lỗi)
Overall, we can see that USA is the country hold the largest amount of medal compared to
other countries, (Overall, the USA won the largest number of medals among the countries
shown.) with more than 2000 medal in all categorize.(with more than 2000 medals in total.)
With gold medal being the one holding the most with almost a 1000 gold medals.(Gold
medals accounted for the largest share.) On the other hand, China held the least amount of
medals, barely reaching 500 medals.
2. Band Scores
TA CC LR GRA Overall
5.5 5.5 6.0 5.5 5.5
3. Nhận xét
Overview xác định được đặc điểm chính của biểu đồ (USA nhiều huy chương nhất, China ít
nhất). Tuy nhiên bài có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng như 'categorize', 'medal', và cấu trúc
câu chưa tự nhiên.
4. Phiên bản nâng band
The bar chart illustrates the total number of Olympic medals won by twelve countries.
Overall, the USA won by far the highest number of medals, whereas China recorded the
lowest total among the countries shown.
Task 3 – Process diagram
1. Bài gốc (đã đánh dấu lỗi)
The diagram below shows how the Australian Bureau of meteorology collects up-to-the-
minute information on the weather (The diagram illustrates how the Australian Bureau of
Meteorology collects up-to-date weather data) in other to produce reliable forecasts.(in
order to produce reliable forecasts.)Overal, there are many devided can be intact with these
information like radio, recorded and Tv program.(Overall, the forecasts are broadcast to the
public through several media such as radio, television and recorded announcements.)
2. Band Scores
TA CC LR GRA Overall
4.5 4.5 5.0 4.5 4.5
3. Nhận xét
Overview chưa mô tả đúng cấu trúc của quy trình và có rất nhiều lỗi chính tả (Overal,
devided, in other). Ngoài ra câu văn chưa rõ nghĩa và khó hiểu.
4. Phiên bản nâng band
The diagram illustrates how the Australian Bureau of Meteorology collects weather data in
order to produce reliable forecasts. Overall, the process consists of several stages, beginning
with data collection and ending with the broadcasting of weather forecasts to the public.
Task 4 – Map development
Student did not attempt this task. Therefore, no band score was given.